It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
In recent years, the internet has brought significant changes to our lives especially as tools of communication. Yet, there remain some disagreements that there has been a doubt from people to the internet in looking for true information. While, there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary. I personally believe that the benefits of the internet far outweigh its drawbacks.
First of all, it is an indisputable fact that the internet has revolutionised the way we communicate. Despite there are some problems of social isolation, for example a problem occasionally seen in people who spend their time with computer terminal rather than relating to people in the real world, most of us have been benefited by the internet as useful and powerful tools of communication both to contact with loved ones in faraway places and to predict the price movement in global trade. Take the use of video call internet access as an example; people can communicate to their relatives by using it to make clear face to face conversation in terms of releasing homesickness each other. As a result, people’s sense of belonging would increase and distance problems have no meaning anymore.
Turning to the other side of the argument, the internet, although, has placed the entire world at our fingertips and make all of the information can be accessed by a few click of a mouse. Admittedly, not all of them available on the internet are reliable and helpful because it could be changed by irresponsible people. This phenomenon causing some people tend more to choose printed newspaper than to read online information. Now, however, there have been provided newspapers that could be downloaded into a smartphone as the mobile trusted information.
All things considered, I once again restate that the internet has had a positive impact on modern life because of its influence on communication. Nevertheless, there is a think concerning the flow of information on the internet not all covering true news.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix number agreement Original: especially as tools of communication Suggested revision: especially as a tool of communication Why it matters: The singular internet is described as one general tool here.
- 2. Remove comma Original: While, there Suggested revision: While there Why it matters: A comma cannot separate the subordinating conjunction from its clause.
- 3. Use clause conjunction Original: Despite Suggested revision: Although Why it matters: “Despite” takes a noun phrase, while “although” introduces a finite clause.
- 4. Use precise collocation Original: problems Suggested revision: risks Why it matters: “Risks of” more precisely describes a possible negative consequence.
- 5. Add article and preposition Original: with computer terminal Suggested revision: at a computer terminal Why it matters: A singular count noun needs an article, and “at” is the natural preposition.
- 6. Use active construction Original: have been benefited by Suggested revision: have benefited from Why it matters: “Benefit from” is the natural active construction for receiving an advantage.
- 7. Match singular subject Original: as useful and powerful tools Suggested revision: as a useful and powerful tool Why it matters: The description must agree with the singular noun “internet.”
- 8. Remove extra preposition Original: both to contact with Suggested revision: both to contact Why it matters: The transitive verb “contact” does not take “with.”
- 9. Use natural noun phrase Original: video call internet access Suggested revision: internet video calling Why it matters: This noun phrase clearly names communication by online video.
- 10. Correct preposition Original: to Suggested revision: with Why it matters: People communicate “with,” not “to,” one another.
- 11. Use natural expression Original: make clear face to face conversation Suggested revision: have clear face-to-face conversations Why it matters: The verb “have,” plural noun, and hyphenated modifier form the natural expression.
- 12. Clarify intended effect Original: in terms of releasing homesickness each other Suggested revision: to reduce their homesickness Why it matters: The original phrase is unidiomatic and does not clearly express reducing homesickness.
Suggested Rewrites
- especially as tools of communication especially as a tool of communication
- While, there While there
- Despite Although
- problems risks
- with computer terminal at a computer terminal
- have been benefited by have benefited from
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response covers both communication benefits and concerns about online reliability, and its paragraph sequence makes the intended argument broadly easy to identify. The weaker discussion of information quality is not fully developed, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors make several sentences difficult to process. Prioritize a clearer explanation of why online sources can be unreliable, supported by a concrete example, then revise sentences for complete and accurate clause structure.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and a personal opinion are presented, with relevant support for communication benefits, but the reliability argument is comparatively brief and unclear.
Explain a specific mechanism of online misinformation and illustrate it with a concrete example before weighing it against the communication benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear four-paragraph progression and uses signposting to distinguish the two views, although faulty connectors and overloaded sentences disrupt local flow.
Use simpler transitions accurately and divide long sentences so each claim, explanation, and example has a clear relationship.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for communication, isolation, reliability, and information access, but frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations reduce precision.
Replace awkward phrases with natural forms such as a means of communication, communicate with relatives, relieve homesickness, and reliable online information.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts a variety of complex structures, but frequent errors in clause formation, agreement, verb forms, articles, and countability sometimes obstruct reading.
Build complete clauses around one main verb and check patterns after despite and although, passive forms, and singular-plural agreement.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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