Nowadays, anyone can post information on the internet even if it is incorrect. As a result, most of the information we read is inaccurate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
As millions of people and organisations of all stripes can post information on the Internet, more people don’t deem the content they see online accurate. However, there is still credible information on the Internet, which is harder to be ferreted out. It is understandable that people desire to be focused on, especially those who want to become stars, the Internet is the most effective way to make this happen. Thus this drives many of them to spread their personal information to attract more viewers so that one day their gifts may be paid attention to. Also, for some business organisations, they usually create exaggerated advertisements to propagate their products, while actually, their products are not as perfect as the advertisements described. On the other hand, in some repressive regimes, media is closely tied to the government. Media outlets provide information not for the well-being of civilians but for the propaganda of the regime so that they can control the regime for their own interests. However, all those critics of Internet information do not mean that there is little reliable information. After all, there are people telling lies out of their personal interests, there are definitely a large group of people being against lies and keeping digging the truth, though. Therefore, the target that those authoritative organisations and individuals posting their information is, to tell the truth, and clear the clouds, which makes their information accurate and reliable. After all, in the world with diverse cultures and races, it is impossible to guarantee all information being objectively accurate. All we should do is to keep a clear head and become more efficient to sort out the accurate information from those detrimentally false so that we can stand on the impartial side.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct comparative meaning Original: more people don’t deem Suggested revision: fewer people deem Why it matters: The replacement clearly expresses that a smaller number of people consider online content accurate.
- 2. Use natural phrasing Original: harder to be ferreted out Suggested revision: harder to find Why it matters: The passive phrasal verb is awkward and unnecessarily informal here.
- 3. Add transition comma Original: Thus this Suggested revision: Thus, this Why it matters: A sentence-opening conjunctive adverb requires a comma.
- 4. Use precise verb Original: spread Suggested revision: share Why it matters: “Share” is the natural verb for voluntarily posting personal details online.
- 5. Use natural passive structure Original: their gifts may be paid attention to Suggested revision: their talents may receive attention Why it matters: The original passive construction is unidiomatic and obscures the intended meaning.
- 6. Remove redundant subject Original: Also, for some business organisations, they usually Suggested revision: Some business organisations also Why it matters: The replacement removes the duplicated subject and places “also” naturally.
- 7. Use advertising collocation Original: propagate Suggested revision: promote Why it matters: Businesses promote products; “propagate” is not natural in this commercial context.
- 8. Use clear concession Original: while actually, their products Suggested revision: although their products Why it matters: “Although” introduces the contrast directly without the misplaced adverb and comma.
- 9. Clarify comparison Original: as perfect as the advertisements described Suggested revision: as good as the advertisements claim Why it matters: Advertisements make claims; they do not describe quality in this grammatical pattern.
- 10. Use correct noun Original: all those critics Suggested revision: all that criticism Why it matters: The sentence refers to critical comments collectively, not to people who criticise.
- 11. Match singular subject Original: do Suggested revision: does Why it matters: The corrected uncountable subject “criticism” requires a singular verb.
- 12. Repair noun-clause structure Original: the target that those authoritative organisations and individuals posting their information is Suggested revision: the aim of those authoritative organisations and individuals posting information is Why it matters: The original relative structure cannot grammatically identify their purpose.
Suggested Rewrites
- more people don’t deem fewer people deem
- harder to be ferreted out harder to find
- Thus this Thus, this
- spread share
- their gifts may be paid attention to their talents may receive attention
- Also, for some business organisations, they usually Some business organisations also
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response takes a sensible qualified position, recognising substantial online misinformation while rejecting the claim that most information is necessarily inaccurate. Its strongest material identifies commercial exaggeration and political propaganda, but the reasoning is uneven, the celebrity discussion is only loosely relevant, and the single-block structure compounds frequent language errors. Prioritise a clear thesis followed by separate evidence-based paragraphs on unreliable and credible sources.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A relevant qualified position emerges and several sources of unreliable information are discussed, but support is uneven and partly tangential.
State the extent of disagreement explicitly and compare concrete evidence from an unreliable source with a credible one.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves broadly from misinformation to reliable content, but the single paragraph, unclear contrasts, and run-on links weaken progression.
Use separate paragraphs for the position, misinformation sources, credible sources, and conclusion, with accurate contrast signals.
Lexical Resource
There is enough range to discuss media, commerce, and credibility, though many awkward collocations reduce precision.
Refine phrases such as 'be focused on', 'gifts may be paid attention to', 'keeping digging', and 'stand on the impartial side'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of structures is attempted, but frequent run-ons, clause errors, agreement problems, and awkward passive forms reduce clarity.
Separate independent clauses into complete sentences and check subject-verb agreement before adding subordinate clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays, anyone can post information on the internet even if it is incorrect. As a result, most of the information we read is inaccurate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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