Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Evaluation of the importance of timing is essential, many people they are sticking to past to show the importance of their present, while many shows that no need to even remember their past because it would not help them at all. It is a very controversial and complicated matter.
Moreover, success will not come without failure, everybody should make an attempt, even if it fails, and it may become a big success if they try it again and again. In addition, our past is our culture and heritage which we should not forget at all, it is a matter of value to our present and future, and will remain such till the day will die.
To sum up, in my opinion, we can not live without a past, it is our value of life. Beside it can help create your experiences and solve your problems better in the future.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use relevant wording Original: importance of timing Suggested revision: importance of the past Why it matters: The current phrase refers to timing rather than the essay's subject of learning from history.
- 2. Fix comma splice Original: essential, many Suggested revision: essential. Many Why it matters: A full stop is needed between these independent clauses.
- 3. Add definite article Original: to past Suggested revision: to the past Why it matters: The fixed reference to historical time requires the definite article.
- 4. Match subject and verb Original: shows Suggested revision: show Why it matters: The plural subject 'many' requires the base verb 'show'.
- 5. Complete the clause Original: that no need to even remember Suggested revision: that there is no need even to remember Why it matters: The clause needs an explicit subject and finite verb.
- 6. Separate independent clauses Original: failure, everybody Suggested revision: failure. Everybody Why it matters: A comma cannot join these two complete clauses by itself.
- 7. Clarify the pronoun Original: even if it fails Suggested revision: even if the attempt fails Why it matters: The pronoun 'it' has no clear grammatical antecedent.
- 8. Remove unclear object Original: try it again and again Suggested revision: try again and again Why it matters: The object pronoun is unnecessary and has no clear referent.
- 9. Fix comma splice Original: not forget at all, it is Suggested revision: not forget at all. It is Why it matters: These independent clauses need stronger punctuation.
- 10. Correct time clause Original: till the day will die Suggested revision: until the day we die Why it matters: The time clause needs a human subject and present tense after 'until'.
- 11. Use standard form Original: can not live without a past Suggested revision: cannot live without the past Why it matters: Use the standard spelling of 'cannot' and the definite article for the shared concept of the past.
- 12. Correct linking phrase Original: Beside it can help create your experiences Suggested revision: Besides, it can help us learn from our experiences Why it matters: 'Besides' introduces an additional point, while 'beside' means next to something.
Suggested Rewrites
- importance of timing importance of the past
- essential, many essential. Many
- to past to the past
- shows show
- that no need to even remember that there is no need even to remember
- failure, everybody failure. Everybody
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response establishes a clear view that the past remains valuable and offers relevant ideas about learning from failure and preserving culture. Its main limitation is the severe under-length treatment: the points are asserted briefly, connections are sometimes unclear, and frequent sentence-level errors weaken precision. The highest priority is to develop two focused reasons with specific explanations or examples while using shorter, accurately punctuated sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A relevant position is evident, but the severely under-length response develops its supporting ideas only minimally.
Extend each main reason with a clear explanation and a specific example that shows its present-day value.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three-paragraph structure is visible, but progression is uneven and several long comma-linked sentences blur relationships between ideas.
Organise one central idea per body paragraph and use clearer sentence boundaries and logical links.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary conveys the main message and includes some relevant terms, though range is limited and several word choices are awkward.
Use precise collocations such as learn from past failures and preserve cultural heritage, checking word form and natural usage.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent agreement, article, clause, and punctuation errors reduce control.
Prioritise complete sentences with correct subject-verb agreement before adding more complex clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or disagree?
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