Life teaches us the lessons and such lessons are the keys to success. How far do you agree with this statement, and do you think formal education is important or people should rely on their life experiences?
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It is rightly said that “In school teachers teach first and then take exams, but in the school of life, it firstly gives us experiences and then we learn lessons out of them.” I completely agree that such real-life incidents are steps towards success. Apart from this, I believebeleive that basic education is essential because it helps everyone lay the foundation for both personal and professional lifea must which helps everyone to create the foundation for personal as well as professional life.
One of my favorite authors, Polo Farmen, has written a very good book called “Experiences are diamonds- Keep them in your heart.” He has mentioned that we are in the school of life forever after we leave universitywhen we step out of university. Indeed, I strongly agree with this. When people learn about anything without putting it into practicewithout practically doing it, it is just like learning to drive a car standing outside. Life, of course, gives practical experience in many areaspractical experience for everything. Admittedly, there will be difficult situationssituations that will give lemons, but it depends on the person whether to learn from them or simply complain about themwhether to learn from unfavorable situations or just to curse them. In most cases, people learn great lessons from their worst experiences. I can relate this to myself, as my ex-boss was always rude to everyone, which taught me a precious thing to be polite with my subordinates and colleagues, because of which I have become a Project Manager at a very early age. Thus, I think life lessons are very important for a person to become successful.
If pizza is life, then, in my view, pizza-base is educationis the education that creates a foundation. Through education, we not only learn aboutcome to know about the essential subjects such as history, science, maths, butmaths but it helps us become good peoplegrooms us to be a good human. As the saying goes,As it is rightly said that, “Your money or property can be stolentheft, but no one can ever take away your wisdom.” Additionally, it opens many employment opportunities for educated peopleopens many doors to get a good job for an educated person. An uneducated person who just relies on life experiences has to struggle a lot, and others often take such peoplemany times people take them for granted because of their illiteracy. In recent years, many countries have made education free and mandatory for their citizens, which has helped them immensely to address fundamental issuesfight basic issues, such as poverty and hungernamely poverty, and hunger. Hence, formal education is as necessary as breathing.
To conclude, in many ways, life givesteaches us priceless experiences which play a vital role in everyone’s journey. However, I support the idea of receiving a comprehensive educationhaving not only basic but full education that can ultimately help society.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response’s strongest feature is its full engagement with both questions, using clear personal and social examples to support the value of experience and education. Its main limitation is uneven language control, with several strained metaphors, inaccurate word choices, and faulty complex structures. The highest-priority improvement is to express the same ideas in more precise academic language and proofread sentence relationships carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts of the task are answered with a clear position and relevant, substantially developed support.
Develop the relationship between formal education and experience more analytically instead of relying heavily on quotations and personal illustration.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is logically organised into focused sections, and progression between the two main arguments is clear.
Reduce formulaic signposting and integrate examples more smoothly into the reasoning of each paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a good range of vocabulary, but spelling, word form, and collocational inaccuracies are noticeable.
Use more precise academic wording and correct expressions such as can be theft, fight issues, and pizza-base.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentences is attempted, though recurring clause, agreement, and parallel-structure errors reduce control.
Check paired structures such as not only...but also and revise overloaded sentences so each clause has a clear grammatical subject.