In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now to research other planets, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Advances in technology make the prospect to find the second Earth potentially viable. While I agree that terrestrial life has become increasingly difficult, I do not believe that we should invest money in finding a new planet to live.
On the one hand, there is no doubt that life is not as easy as it was in the past. The main problem is the growing level of environmental pollution that adversely affects humankind in all parts of the world. The rising consumption of natural resources such as gas, oil and coal has resulted in an enormous amount of carbon emissions being released into the atmosphere, which impairs the air quality and accelerates climate change. Therefore, the consequences of this are grave. People in many big cities are suffering respiratory diseases; more lands are being shrunk due to the rise of sea levels; and there are frequent heat waves in tropical countries. As a result, human life is now put in danger.
On the other hand, spending money finding another home for all creatures on the Earth is not an effective measure. There is little hope of seeking a planet that has favorable conditions for life while the expenditure can be extremely huge. In contrast, a much better solution would be that we should invest in environmental projects and encourage people to lead a more environmentally friendly lifestyle. For example, green energy should be harnessed and made more available to replace our dependence on fossil fuels, and individuals ought to opt for public transport rather than driving their vehicles. Such actions can cut exhaust emissions and slow down the effects of global warming, making the Earth a more desirable place for us all.
In conclusion, although global warming is a global malady, it seems ludicrous to suggest that people should find another planet to settle down.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct complement pattern Original: prospect to find Suggested revision: prospect of finding Why it matters: The noun 'prospect' takes 'of' followed by a gerund in this structure.
- 2. Use natural phrasing Original: the Suggested revision: a Why it matters: The indefinite article better conveys the idea of another Earth-like world.
- 3. Choose precise verb Original: invest money in finding Suggested revision: invest money in searching for Why it matters: 'Searching for' more precisely describes research intended to locate a suitable planet.
- 4. Add dependent preposition Original: suffering respiratory diseases Suggested revision: suffering from respiratory diseases Why it matters: The verb 'suffer' requires 'from' before the name of an illness.
- 5. Fix noun and verb Original: more lands are being shrunk Suggested revision: more land is being lost Why it matters: 'Land' is uncountable here, and 'being lost' expresses the effect of rising seas naturally.
- 6. Correct collocation Original: of Suggested revision: in Why it matters: A change in a measured level is conventionally expressed as a 'rise in' that level.
- 7. Use concise expression Original: finding another home for all creatures on the Earth Suggested revision: finding another home for all life on Earth Why it matters: 'All life on Earth' is a more concise and idiomatic expression for the intended meaning.
- 8. Clarify intended meaning Original: There is little hope of seeking Suggested revision: There is little prospect of finding Why it matters: The revision expresses the low likelihood of success rather than a lack of motivation to search.
- 9. Improve collocation Original: the expenditure can be extremely huge Suggested revision: the expenditure could be enormous Why it matters: 'Enormous expenditure' is the natural formal collocation, while 'extremely huge' is redundant.
- 10. Avoid awkward metaphor Original: global warming is a global malady Suggested revision: global warming is a serious global problem Why it matters: 'Malady' usually refers to illness and sounds unnatural when describing global warming.
- 11. Complete the construction Original: another planet to settle down Suggested revision: another planet on which to settle Why it matters: The location governed by 'settle' needs an explicit preposition in this construction.
- 12. Use clearer wording Original: terrestrial life Suggested revision: life on Earth Why it matters: 'Life on Earth' conveys the intended meaning more directly in this context.
Suggested Rewrites
- prospect to find prospect of finding
- the a
- invest money in finding invest money in searching for
- suffering respiratory diseases suffering from respiratory diseases
- more lands are being shrunk more land is being lost
- of in
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response presents a clear, consistent rejection of spending on planetary research and develops a practical alternative through environmental investment, with strong organization and varied language. Its main limitation is that the first body paragraph mainly describes worsening conditions on Earth rather than directly evaluating research funding, while several awkward collocations reduce precision. Prioritize linking every supporting point explicitly to the funding decision and refining word combinations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported with relevant reasons and an alternative, although some development is indirect.
Connect the discussion of Earth's problems more explicitly to whether funding planetary research is justified.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through well-focused paragraphs, and cohesive devices guide the argument effectively.
Make the relationship between the first and second body paragraphs more explicit so the contrast feels fully integrated.
Lexical Resource
A broad range of topic-specific vocabulary conveys complex ideas, but several unnatural collocations weaken precision.
Replace awkward combinations such as descriptions of land shrinking or a planet to live with natural, idiomatic phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide variety of complex structures is used accurately, with only occasional non-impeding errors.
Refine complement and preposition patterns in phrases such as the prospect of finding and a planet to live on.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now to research other planets, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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