Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
Perhaps the greatest threat to the world is not regional conflicts, terrorism, or political instability, but climate change and environmental degradation. If we do not address this greatest danger properly and timely, we will be responsible for our own extinction, and I do not believe that we should find ways to live with it by doing nothing about it.
To commence with, the rising global temperature, Arctic ice melting, deforestation, air pollution and depletion of the ozone layer are all connected and would lead to a single event - the destruction of the world. We have already harmed the environment to a great extent, and the time has come for all nations to work together to reduce the environmental damage caused by our actions and greed. The sudden flood in the USA, intense storms in Asia, and unpredictable droughts in Africa are all resulting from climate change, and this change is occurring more rapidly than ever before. If we let this continue, the future would be even more perilous. According to the Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change, consequences of climate change include the increased intensity of storms including tropical cyclones, increased risks of drought, wetter Asian monsoons, and, possibly, more intense mid-latitude storms.
The last thing humans should do to turn a blind eye to this imminent problem and learn to live with it, of course, unless we want the termination of the human race! There is a lot to do and we should start implementing regional cooperation right now. Every individual should contribute by emitting fewer fumes and planting as many trees as possible while the use of fossil fuel should be globally prohibited. Industrial countries have more responsibilities as they contribute more to environmental degradation and an international panel should be formed by giving it supreme power to make any legislation to curb the environmental damages.
To conclude, for our existence on Mother Earth, we should take immediate actions at individual, regional and international levels to check climate change. Otherwise, we will fail to save our planet and future generations.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural adverb Original: timely Suggested revision: promptly Why it matters: The adverb ‘promptly’ is more natural when describing how quickly a danger is addressed.
- 2. Use plural noun Original: the rising global temperature Suggested revision: rising global temperatures Why it matters: The general phenomenon is more naturally expressed with the plural count noun.
- 3. Improve noun phrase Original: Arctic ice melting Suggested revision: melting Arctic ice Why it matters: This word order forms a clearer parallel noun phrase in the list.
- 4. Correct causal phrase Original: are all resulting from climate change Suggested revision: are all consequences of climate change Why it matters: ‘Consequences of’ expresses the causal relationship more naturally here.
- 5. Choose precise noun Original: termination Suggested revision: extinction Why it matters: ‘Extinction’ is the precise term for the end of the human race.
- 6. Use precise term Original: emitting fewer fumes Suggested revision: producing fewer emissions Why it matters: ‘Emissions’ is a more precise environmental term than ‘fumes’ in this context.
- 7. Use plural form Original: fuel Suggested revision: fuels Why it matters: The plural is required when referring generally to coal, oil, and other fuels.
- 8. Use natural collocation Original: more Suggested revision: greater Why it matters: ‘Greater responsibilities’ is the natural collocation for a higher degree of obligation.
- 9. Correct verb choice Original: make any legislation Suggested revision: enact legislation Why it matters: Governments or empowered bodies enact legislation rather than make any legislation.
- 10. Use uncountable noun Original: the environmental damages Suggested revision: environmental damage Why it matters: ‘Damage’ is uncountable when referring generally to harm to the environment.
- 11. Use fixed phrase Original: actions Suggested revision: action Why it matters: The fixed expression ‘take action’ normally uses the uncountable singular noun.
- 12. Sentence rewrite Original: The last thing humans should do to turn a blind eye to this imminent problem and learn to live with it, of course, unless we want the termination of the human race! Suggested revision: The last thing humans should do is turn a blind eye to this imminent problem and learn to live with it, unless we want the extinction of the human race. Why it matters: The original construction is missing ‘is’ after ‘should do’ and leaves ‘unless’ attached awkwardly.
Suggested Rewrites
- timely promptly
- the rising global temperature rising global temperatures
- Arctic ice melting melting Arctic ice
- are all resulting from climate change are all consequences of climate change
- termination extinction
- emitting fewer fumes producing fewer emissions
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response presents an emphatic, consistent position and develops it through relevant consequences and proposed action at several levels. Its main limitation is that some claims are overstated and several otherwise sophisticated expressions are awkward or imprecise. The highest-priority improvement is to use more measured, precisely supported reasoning while refining collocations and sentence construction.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear throughout, and relevant reasons and solutions are developed with supporting detail.
Replace exaggerated predictions with more measured causal analysis and specific evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through distinct paragraphs, with generally well-managed referencing and linking.
Smooth the transition into the solutions paragraph and avoid occasional abrupt or rhetorical shifts.
Lexical Resource
A wide vocabulary conveys complex environmental ideas, though several collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Refine phrases such as legislation and environmental damage to make word combinations consistently natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad range of complex structures is used with strong overall control despite occasional construction and punctuation errors.
Proofread complex sentences for missing verbs, article choices, and clause-boundary punctuation.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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