Today’s food travel thousands of miles before it reaches the customer. Is this a positive or negative trend?
Sample Response
We are living in globalization era so that’s why there are no barriers to communication and transportation. Nowadays, food import and export to other area become popular without any restriction as compared to past. It has some pros and cons.
First of all, when food travels to long journey then people receive the variety of food and also help to taste the different cuisine. All in all, people can know about another cuisine. For instance, in India, there are some food and fruits which are imported from other countries and states such as whole wheat pieces of bread, noodles and so on. Moreover, it also increases competition. As a result of it, local farmers produce high-quality products to survive in the competitive market. Apart from it, when in world some emergency situations occur such as war, natural disasters that food is very helpful at that time.
However, every coin has two sides there is some negative impact also. Due to traveling food reduce the quality as well as nutrition value. Furthermore, when food reaches its destination after long travel then it loses its freshness. In addition to it, if one country import food then it put an extra burden on the pocket of the common person. For example, transport charges are included in food price that made it very costly.
To put in a nutshell, I pen down saying that imported food is beneficial as well as harmful also.It gives a chance to taste variety but some preservatives are used to preserve the food that is detrimental to health.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Missing article structure Original: globalization era Suggested revision: an era of globalization Why it matters: This noun phrase needs an article and an of-phrase.
- 2. Redundant connector Original: so that’s why Suggested revision: which is why Why it matters: Using both so and that’s why duplicates the causal link.
- 3. Use plural nouns Original: food import and export Suggested revision: food imports and exports Why it matters: The general activities require plural count nouns here.
- 4. Plural form needed Original: area Suggested revision: areas Why it matters: Other requires a plural count noun in this general statement.
- 5. Use present perfect Original: become popular Suggested revision: have become popular Why it matters: The present perfect describes a change continuing into the present.
- 6. Add definite article Original: as compared to past Suggested revision: compared with the past Why it matters: Past needs the definite article when referring to an earlier period generally.
- 7. Correct travel phrase Original: travels to long journey Suggested revision: travels a long distance Why it matters: Food travels a distance rather than to a journey.
- 8. Improve word choice Original: receive the variety of food Suggested revision: gain access to a variety of foods Why it matters: Gain access expresses availability more naturally than receive.
- 9. Fix subject structure Original: and also help to taste Suggested revision: and can also taste Why it matters: The original verb phrase lacks a grammatical subject relationship.
- 10. Use plural noun Original: the different cuisine Suggested revision: different cuisines Why it matters: The general reference requires a plural noun without the.
- 11. Use natural collocation Original: know about another cuisine Suggested revision: learn about other cuisines Why it matters: Learn about is the natural phrase for gaining cultural knowledge.
- 12. Use countable plural Original: food Suggested revision: foods Why it matters: Foods is countable here because the writer refers to different products.
Suggested Rewrites
- globalization era an era of globalization
- so that’s why which is why
- food import and export food imports and exports
- area areas
- become popular have become popular
- as compared to past compared with the past
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response covers several benefits and drawbacks, and the broad paragraph sequence is easy to follow. However, it never clearly decides whether the trend is positive or negative, while several supporting points remain brief or imprecise and frequent grammatical and collocational errors reduce clarity. Prioritise a definite position, develop two or three directly relevant reasons with precise examples, and proofread sentence structure and agreement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response discusses both benefits and drawbacks, but its position remains unclear and several ideas receive limited or loosely relevant support.
State explicitly whether the trend is mainly positive or negative and develop each selected reason with a clear explanation and relevant example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure provides broad progression, although mechanical linking and weak connections within some sentences interrupt the flow.
Use fewer formulaic linkers and make the logical relationship between each claim, explanation, and example explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss trade, competition, freshness, and cost, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms limit precision.
Learn and check natural combinations such as travel a long distance, nutritional value, import food, and place a burden on consumers.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and longer structures communicates the main message, but frequent agreement, article, preposition, and sentence-boundary errors reduce control.
Proofread every clause for subject-verb agreement and articles, then separate run-on constructions into complete, correctly punctuated sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Today’s food travel thousands of miles before it reaches the customer. Is this a positive or negative trend?
Your response
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