Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which three you consider the most effective. comics books radio television film theater
Sample Response
In our daily life, we communicate information through lots of different media like the internet, televisions, radios, books, cell phones, films etc. We are living in such a time when information is one of the most important issues and the information technologies as well as the communication media greatly influence our lives. The rapid-growing websites and TV channels are many of few little examples how media are spreading to make information easily accessible. All the media for information interchange have advantages and disadvantages and not all can attract all types of audiences. Comics, books, radios, televisions, film and theatre are all very powerful media for communicating information. In my opinion books, televisions and film among those aforementioned six media are most effective.
Books are the witness of history and the main source from which we gain knowledge. From a very ancient period till now, books have been working as the light-house for our society. In our childhood, we gather most of our knowledge and skills from books. It opens new horizons in front of us. The writer writes down their experiences, imaginations, knowledge, explanation etc. about each and every issue of our lives. Books are the long-lasting protocol to make a bridge among writers and readers.
However, all are not happy to read books. They expect something easier and more vivid. Music, radios, films etc. are more appealing to them. Television is another powerful media. Watching television is a part of our daily lives. Most of the people who have a TV set, watch programs, news etc. with apt attention. It is a strong medium for Government and other organisations to send their messages to the mass population. Program representatives also broadcast the people's view and opinions about different controversial issues in TV programs. However, this medium has lots of demerits and bad impacts. Government and politically biased organisations often send negative and misleading news. Again young people watch different satellite channels and try to adopt the alien culture which is really harmful for the culture and tradition of a country.
Films are an audio-visual representation and can catch the attention of people from different geographical locations, races and cultures. A good film can shape someone's morality and doctrine and the film-makers with their huge amount of money, are so careful to make their films realistic and eye-absorbing. Every film has a direct or potential message or moral. On the contrary, some films also bring a wrong message to us. For example, protagonists are always smoking in the films and it seems that smoking is a good and smart habit. It causes many younger people imitate them smoking.
In conclusion, I would like to state that books, televisions and films are the most powerful and effective medias for communicating information.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use formal quantity Original: lots of different media Suggested revision: many different media Why it matters: Many is more appropriate than lots of in an academic essay.
- 2. Clarify the claim Original: information is one of the most important issues Suggested revision: access to information is increasingly important Why it matters: Information itself is not an issue, while access to it can be described as important.
- 3. Use the adverb form Original: rapid-growing Suggested revision: rapidly growing Why it matters: The adverb rapidly is needed to modify the participle growing.
- 4. Fix the quantity phrase Original: many of few little examples Suggested revision: a few examples Why it matters: The original combines incompatible quantity expressions.
- 5. Add the introductory comma Original: In my opinion books Suggested revision: In my opinion, books Why it matters: A comma should follow the introductory phrase In my opinion.
- 6. Avoid redundant reference Original: those aforementioned six media Suggested revision: the six listed media Why it matters: Listed is concise, while those and aforementioned duplicate the backward reference.
- 7. Add the superlative article Original: are most effective Suggested revision: are the most effective Why it matters: The superlative most effective requires the definite article.
- 8. Use natural collocation Original: the witness of history Suggested revision: witnesses to history Why it matters: Witnesses to history is the natural expression, and it agrees with the plural subject books.
- 9. Use a clear time span Original: From a very ancient period till now Suggested revision: From ancient times to the present Why it matters: The revision expresses the long historical period naturally and concisely.
- 10. Match the plural referent Original: It opens Suggested revision: They open Why it matters: The pronoun refers to the plural noun books, so it must also be plural.
- 11. Make the list natural Original: experiences, imaginations, knowledge, explanation etc. Suggested revision: experiences, ideas, knowledge and explanations Why it matters: The revised nouns are natural in this context and form a complete parallel list.
- 12. Use the correct medium Original: long-lasting protocol Suggested revision: lasting medium Why it matters: A book can be a lasting medium, whereas protocol does not mean a channel of communication.
Suggested Rewrites
- lots of different media many different media
- information is one of the most important issues access to information is increasingly important
- rapid-growing rapidly growing
- many of few little examples a few examples
- In my opinion books In my opinion, books
- those aforementioned six media the six listed media
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response clearly selects books, television, and film and offers relevant advantages and disadvantages, with especially substantial treatment of television. Its main limitation is that the three media are mostly described separately rather than directly compared, while the disadvantages of books receive little development. The highest-priority improvement is to structure explicit comparisons around shared factors such as reach, permanence, accessibility, and reliability.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay identifies three effective media and discusses relevant merits and drawbacks, but direct comparison is limited and the treatment of books is uneven.
Compare all three media against common criteria and give books a clearly developed disadvantage before reaching the final judgment.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a generally logical sequence and clear topic progression, although one paragraph combines the drawback of books with the discussion of television.
Give each medium a focused paragraph and use comparative links to show how it performs relative to the other two.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, but frequent awkward or inaccurate expressions reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace unnatural phrases such as long-lasting protocol, eye-absorbing, and effective medias with standard academic collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex structures, but recurring errors in number, agreement, articles, and verb patterns remain noticeable.
Check countable nouns and verb complements, especially media forms and constructions such as causes younger people to imitate.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which three you consider the most effective. comics books radio television film theater
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