Meeting someone for the first time through the internet is never a good idea. Do you agree?
Sample Response
It is manifestly clear that we are facing an increasing reliance on the internet. People try to meet friends through it even if they have never met each other before. Such a trendSuch trend, admittedly, produces some problemsproblems to some extent, but is quite valuable for us, since it improves the efficiencyadds to the efficiency of communication.
Establishing contacts via the internet has the reputation of being dangerous and uncertaindangerous, uncertain and unsafe. The chief problem is that you have little idea about who is sitting in front of the screen at the other end of the connectionon the other end of the web: is it a wanted criminala criminal wanted, or a cold-blooded outlaw. Through the messages being exchanged, you can by no means verify their truthfulnessassure their validity and certainty. In this case, how can we build trust with the online contactchatting mate via cyberspace? So it seems the internet may be an unwise choicefar from a wise choice to establish personal connectionsset-up personal links.
This opinion, however, does not survive the experiences in which trust has already been built in advance. This is particularly trueThat particularly applies to the daily work in a company, especially an international one. It is not necessary for an new employeeemployee newly joining to get familiar with all the staff before starting workembarking on his work. But as colleagues comethe colleagues come from the same corporation, they are trusted as a resulttrusted correspondingly as a result, so that confidential information can be transferred without barrierswithout any barrier.
Granted, even under such circumstancescircumstance, leakage of information and data theftpirating are inevitable if some employees commit crimes against the company. But this only happens rarely if sufficient protectiveprotecting regulations are in placehave been applied.
In conclusion, whether meeting someone new through the internet is a good approach depends on the level of trust. Without something of this kind, communication of any kind will be by no means fruitful. The implicationimplications of all this is that it is not the means of communication that matters, but the establishment of trust.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is well organized and maintains a clear conditional position, with a logical movement from online risks to circumstances where trust may exist. Its main limitation is that the workplace example partly shifts from meeting a stranger online to communicating with already trusted colleagues, weakening the direct answer. The priority is to develop a genuinely relevant counterexample and explain precisely how it disproves the word “never.”
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear qualified disagreement and explores risk and trust, but its main counterexample is only partly relevant to first-time online meetings.
Use a counterexample involving people who genuinely first meet online, then explain why safeguards make that meeting a sound choice.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and contrastive transitions create a clear progression from dangers to exceptions and then to the final position.
Strengthen the logical bridge between pre-existing organizational trust and the claim about meeting an individual for the first time.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is varied and generally conveys the argument clearly, but awkward choices and collocations sometimes sound imprecise.
Replace strained expressions with natural terms for online contacts, identity verification, data theft, and workplace safeguards.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentences is used with generally clear meaning, despite recurring article, agreement, and noun-phrase errors.
Review determiners and subject-verb agreement, and simplify sentence openings where dense phrasing creates grammatical strain.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Meeting someone for the first time through the internet is never a good idea. Do you agree?
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