Some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that girls and boys benefit more from attending mixed schools. Which education system do you think is better? Why?
Sample Response
The school environment, teachers and the curriculum play a crucial role in developing students' overall performance and personality. Having studied in both settings—settings - all-girls and mixed-school environmentsall girls and mixed school environment, I have experienced the differences between these two systems. I believeAnd, I believe that mixed schools offer more benefits to students. AdmittedlyNo doubt, girls and boys are different with respect to their thoughts, preferences, physical characteristicsorientations and the way they respond to different situations. Studying in a same-sex school helpsunquestionably helps students become comfortable with their classmates and develop camaraderiecomradery easily. It saves them from unnecessary distractions and helps them focus more on their studies. However, when girls and boys study, play and work on school projects together, they learn from each other, and this activity fosters mutual respectcatalyses moral respect. It allows them to understand their differencestheir mutual differences better and be more considerate towards each other. This equal treatmentThe neutral treatment helps them to look beyond gender and treat individuals equally. Such students find it easiercomparatively easier to cope with mixed-gender situations, inat offices or on social occasions. Subsequently, it equips them with the skillsfacilitates them with skills to create meaningful and lasting relationships with people. Moreover, men and women share the same workspace in modern offices. Being able to work efficiently with colleagues is just as important as having the right skills for a job. Even outside the workspace, one has to interact with both genders almost dailyon a daily basis. Thus, the mixed school atmosphere prepares students for life beyond the school groundsoutside its compound walls. To conclude, I believe that students get an opportunity to develop their overall social skills when they study in mixed schools. It exposes them to shared activities and prepares them for future workplacesfuture job places.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay states a clear preference for mixed schools and develops relevant reasons around mutual respect, social skills, and preparation for adult workplaces, while briefly acknowledging the focus advantage of single-sex education. Its main weakness is expression: several awkward collocations reduce precision, and the single-block layout makes the argument feel less controlled. The priority is to organise each reason in a separate paragraph and support one central benefit with a more concrete example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear preference is maintained and supported with several relevant benefits, though some claims remain general rather than fully illustrated.
Develop one concrete example showing how mixed-school collaboration prepares a student for a later workplace or social situation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The reasoning progresses logically from limited benefits of separation to stronger benefits of mixed education, but the single-block format weakens organisation.
Use distinct paragraphs for the introduction, the alternative view, social development, workplace preparation, and conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and topic-appropriate, but several collocations such as 'catalyses moral respect' and 'facilitates them with skills' sound unnatural.
Prefer precise phrases such as 'fosters mutual respect', 'equips students with skills', and 'future workplaces'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is generally well controlled, with occasional errors in punctuation, article use, and reference.
Revise the opening comparison for grammatical parallelism and ensure pronouns such as 'it' have an unmistakable referent.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that girls and boys benefit more from attending mixed schools. Which education system do you think is better? Why?
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