In today’s world, many people use mobile phones and the internet to communication with others. This has resulted in the use of new words and different forms of spelling and grammar. Why do you think these changes have happened? Are they positive or negative development?
Sample Response
There have been many changes in the way people communicate over the last 20 years. It is understandable that these changes have affected people’s relationship and many new forms of words, abbreviations, grammatical rules and way of writing have emerged, whether this is a good thing or a bad thing should be justified.
In the past, people used to communicate by writing letters and speaking on the phone. However, technology has changed this, and now emails texts and the internet are the most common communication tools, especially for young people. These methods of technology are much faster than the old ones and these means that people write more quickly and communicate more frequently. Unfortunately, the speed of modern communication system has reduced the accuracy of our messages. This is because people make up their own words and abbreviations and some of these can become quite popular. In my hometown, for example, LOL means’ laugh out loud: and children write this and say it. What is more, punctuation may be missing, and people worry less about how they spell words. Yet language change is not necessarily a bad thing. Informal texts and emails are just messages between friends. It does not matter too much how they are written. The important thing is that people can switch to more accurate language when they need. However, if they lose this ability and formal communication becomes too careless, then there will be problems.
All in all, I do not think you can stop changing, and you cannot prevent new ways of communicating. On the other hand, it is still necessary to make sure that everyone can appreciate and should have an interest in the past because it has made us what we are now.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use plural noun Original: people’s relationship Suggested revision: people’s relationships Why it matters: The statement refers generally to relationships among many people, so the noun should be plural.
- 2. Remove awkward wording Original: many new forms of words Suggested revision: many new words Why it matters: “New words” expresses the intended idea directly without the unnatural phrase “forms of words.”
- 3. Fix number agreement Original: way of writing have emerged Suggested revision: ways of writing have emerged Why it matters: The plural verb “have emerged” requires the plural subject “ways.”
- 4. Clarify vague reference Original: However, technology has changed this Suggested revision: However, technology has transformed communication Why it matters: Naming “communication” removes the vague reference created by “this.”
- 5. Punctuate the list Original: emails texts and the internet Suggested revision: emails, texts and the internet Why it matters: Commas are needed to separate the three items in the list.
- 6. Use concise noun Original: methods of technology Suggested revision: technologies Why it matters: “Technologies” is the natural noun for the digital tools being compared.
- 7. Clarify comparison Original: the old ones Suggested revision: older communication methods Why it matters: The explicit noun phrase makes the comparison easier to follow.
- 8. Fix demonstrative agreement Original: these means that Suggested revision: this means that Why it matters: The singular demonstrative “this” is required when referring to the preceding situation.
- 9. Use plural noun Original: modern communication system Suggested revision: modern communication systems Why it matters: The general reference to multiple forms of communication requires a plural noun.
- 10. Use precise creation verb Original: make up their own words Suggested revision: create new words Why it matters: The revision expresses lexical innovation more precisely and concisely.
- 11. Correct quotation punctuation Original: means’ laugh out loud: Suggested revision: means ‘laugh out loud’, Why it matters: The opening quotation mark must follow “means,” and a comma should close the quoted definition within the sentence.
- 12. Clarify abbreviation use Original: children write this and say it Suggested revision: children use it in writing and speech Why it matters: The revision describes both written and spoken use clearly and naturally.
Suggested Rewrites
- people’s relationship people’s relationships
- many new forms of words many new words
- way of writing have emerged ways of writing have emerged
- However, technology has changed this However, technology has transformed communication
- emails texts and the internet emails, texts and the internet
- methods of technology technologies
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response explains how speed and informality encourage abbreviated language and offers a useful distinction between casual and formal communication. Its main limitation is that the overall judgement is not clearly resolved, especially in a conclusion that shifts to an unclear point about appreciating the past, while recurring sentence-level errors reduce precision. Prioritise a direct positive-or-negative conclusion that follows from the body and careful grammatical editing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
Both causes and effects are discussed with relevant explanation, but the final evaluation is qualified and ultimately unclear.
State a definite overall judgement and ensure the conclusion directly answers whether the development is positive or negative.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organised into logical stages and the main body progresses clearly, though the introduction is overloaded and the conclusion loses focus.
Use a concise thesis in the introduction and make the conclusion summarise the body rather than introduce an unrelated idea.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for discussing communication and language change, but several inaccurate forms and collocations reduce precision.
Check noun agreement and natural phrasing in expressions concerning relationships, communication methods, systems, and language accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a range of sentence types, but run-ons, agreement errors, omitted words, and faulty clause structures occur repeatedly.
Break overloaded sentences into complete clauses and proofread subject-verb agreement, plurals, and missing infinitive complements.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In today’s world, many people use mobile phones and the internet to communication with others. This has resulted in the use of new words and different forms of spelling and grammar. Why do you think these changes have happened? Are they positive or negative development?
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