In today’s world, many people use mobile phones and the internet to communication with others. This has resulted in the use of new words and different forms of spelling and grammar. Why do you think these changes have happened? Are they positive or negative development?
Sample Response
There have been many changes in the way people communicate over the last 20 years. It is understandable that these changes have affected people’s relationshipsrelationship and many new wordsmany new forms of words, abbreviations, grammatical rules and waysway of writing have emerged, whether this is a good thing or a bad thing should be justified.
In the past, people used to communicate by writing letters and speaking on the phone. However, technology has transformed communicationHowever, technology has changed this, and now emails, texts and the internetemails texts and the internet are the most common communication tools, especially for young people. These technologiesmethods of technology are much faster than older communication methodsthe old ones and thisthese means that people write more quickly and communicate more frequently. Unfortunately, the speed of modern communication systemssystem has reduced the accuracy of our messages. This is because people create new wordsmake up their own words and abbreviations and some of these can become quite popular. In my hometown, for example, LOL means ‘laugh out loud’,means’ laugh out loud: and children use it in writing and speechchildren write this and say it. What is more, punctuation may be missing, and people worry less about how they spell words. Yet language change is not necessarily a bad thing. Informal texts and emails are just messages between friends. It does not matter too much how they are written. The important thing is that people can switch to more accurate language when they need towhen they need. However, if they lose this ability and formal communication becomes too inaccuratecareless, then there will be problems.
All in all, I do not think you can stop language from changingstop changing, and you cannot prevent new ways of communicating. On the other hand, it is still necessary to make sure that everyone can appreciate the past and take an interest in itappreciate and should have an interest in the past because it has shaped who we are todaymade us what we are now.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response explains how speed and informality encourage abbreviated language and offers a useful distinction between casual and formal communication. Its main limitation is that the overall judgement is not clearly resolved, especially in a conclusion that shifts to an unclear point about appreciating the past, while recurring sentence-level errors reduce precision. Prioritise a direct positive-or-negative conclusion that follows from the body and careful grammatical editing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both causes and effects are discussed with relevant explanation, but the final evaluation is qualified and ultimately unclear.
State a definite overall judgement and ensure the conclusion directly answers whether the development is positive or negative.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organised into logical stages and the main body progresses clearly, though the introduction is overloaded and the conclusion loses focus.
Use a concise thesis in the introduction and make the conclusion summarise the body rather than introduce an unrelated idea.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for discussing communication and language change, but several inaccurate forms and collocations reduce precision.
Check noun agreement and natural phrasing in expressions concerning relationships, communication methods, systems, and language accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a range of sentence types, but run-ons, agreement errors, omitted words, and faulty clause structures occur repeatedly.
Break overloaded sentences into complete clauses and proofread subject-verb agreement, plurals, and missing infinitive complements.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In today’s world, many people use mobile phones and the internet to communication with others. This has resulted in the use of new words and different forms of spelling and grammar. Why do you think these changes have happened? Are they positive or negative development?
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