What do you consider to be the most important room in a house? Why is this room more important to you than any other room? Use specific reasons and relevant examples to support your opinion.
Sample Response
My husband and I live in an apartment, which includes a bedroom, living room, bathroom and kitchen. We do not have children yet, so our apartment is pretty small but it is cheap and cozy. If I would have to choose the most important room in a house I think it would be living room. In the following paragraphs, I will present my reasons to support my answer.
First of all, a living room is the place where we take our guests. It is the main and the biggest room in our apartment and we try to keep it clean and cozy. For example, my husband vacuums it every other day especially when it is wet outside and our dog makes dirty sports on the carpet with its paws after a walk. Second of all, I think that living room is the most important room in our house because we spend most of our time there watching TV, having our dinner and just talking with each other. Finally, our living room is a place where we study. Since our apartment is rather small we do not have a room for studying, so I have my table with the computer on it in our living room. I like to study there because the room is perfectly light with the large windows and the beautiful view from them.
My parents have a much bigger house with six rooms, large kitchen and two floors. However, I think that my mother would agree with me that their living room is the most important room in the house. When we visit them we always gather there, lay the table, and have a long talk. My mother makes delicious cakes and aromatic tea. I like those moments.
To sum up, I think many people will agree with me that living room is the most important room in a house because it is the room where people spend most of their time at home.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use concise phrasing Original: apartment, which includes Suggested revision: apartment with Why it matters: The shorter prepositional phrase expresses the same idea more directly.
- 2. Choose formal wording Original: pretty small Suggested revision: quite small Why it matters: Quite is more suitable than pretty in a formal essay.
- 3. Correct conditional form Original: If I would have to choose Suggested revision: If I had to choose Why it matters: A hypothetical condition requires the past form had rather than would have.
- 4. Separate the clause Original: in a house I think Suggested revision: in a house, I think Why it matters: A comma is needed before the inserted reporting clause.
- 5. Add the article Original: would be living room Suggested revision: would be the living room Why it matters: The singular countable noun needs the definite article here.
- 6. Use direct wording Original: present my reasons to support my answer Suggested revision: explain the reasons for my choice Why it matters: This revision states the essay's purpose more naturally and precisely.
- 7. Correct the collocation Original: take our guests Suggested revision: receive our guests Why it matters: Receive guests is the natural collocation for welcoming visitors into a room.
- 8. Avoid repeated article Original: the main and the biggest room Suggested revision: the main and biggest room Why it matters: The shared article does not need to be repeated before the second coordinated adjective.
- 9. Mark the added detail Original: every other day especially Suggested revision: every other day, especially Why it matters: A comma separates the main timing phrase from the following emphasis.
- 10. Correct word choice Original: makes dirty sports Suggested revision: leaves dirty spots Why it matters: Spots is the intended noun, and leaves is the natural verb for marks on a carpet.
- 11. Use formal sequencing Original: Second of all Suggested revision: Secondly Why it matters: Secondly is a more concise and formal sequencing device.
- 12. Add definite article Original: that living room Suggested revision: that the living room Why it matters: The specific room requires the definite article.
Suggested Rewrites
- apartment, which includes apartment with
- pretty small quite small
- If I would have to choose If I had to choose
- in a house I think in a house, I think
- would be living room would be the living room
- present my reasons to support my answer explain the reasons for my choice
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear preference for the living room and supports it with several relevant personal examples, making the central position easy to follow. Its main limitation is that some supporting details are rather simple or only loosely connected to comparative importance, while recurring article, conditional, and collocation errors reduce precision. Prioritise deeper explanation of why each function outweighs those of other rooms while improving grammatical control.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported with several relevant reasons and personal examples, although some points remain fairly simple.
Develop each reason by explicitly explaining why that benefit makes the living room more important than alternative rooms.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear introduction, body, supporting example, and conclusion, though sequencing language is somewhat formulaic.
Use subtler links between related ideas and organise each main reason into a more fully developed paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient for the topic and includes some apt descriptive language, but repetition and inaccurate collocations reduce precision.
Replace repeated wording and revise expressions such as guest reception, carpet marks, and room lighting with more natural collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys meaning clearly, but article, conditional, agreement, and punctuation errors recur.
Focus on article use with room names and accurate conditional forms, then proofread sentence boundaries and agreement.
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