In your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation innovation of the past 200 years?
Sample Response
From my point of view, new discoveries cannot be limited; in particular, new innovative technological devices have increased and being developed every day. Transportation is one of the most important discoveries in the world and has made it possible to have a modern world. In my opinion train is the most significant innovation in the past 2 centuries in the transportation field. Transportation has been a prominent part of humankind and the demand for new and more comfortable vehicles made people discover life-enhancing transportation innovations. Over the past 200 years, transportation has been reformed from ordinary trains to more complicated and developed magnetic trains. In my opinion, all vehicles such as cars, trains, airplanes or ships have their own importance for people. Consequently, cars are undoubtedly predominant in our daily life as these vehicles are comfortable and have adequate speed. Plains or ships comprise the majority in the transportation of loads. Furthermore, travelling to short-distanced places is more optimal by trains. So, those vehicles are specialised in particular areas. From my perspective, the most remarkable transportation vehicle which is has specialised in its area is the train. In particular, fast trains of modern days. These trains have been discovered by Chinese engineers and are spreading around the world and are being utilised by many other countries. The advantage of these trains is that they are too fast. Also, it can be clearly understood from its name which is ‘fast train’. That train's speed makes it easier to travel between places without wasting time. And developers are trying to discover a new magnetic train which can travel faster in the future. To sum up, humankind was always in search for new innovations and transportation discoveries have changed over the past 2 centuries and fast trains are the most significant innovations in my opinion.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add punctuation and article Original: In my opinion train Suggested revision: In my opinion, the train Why it matters: The introductory phrase needs a comma and the singular noun needs an article.
- 2. Use the right verb Original: transportation has been reformed Suggested revision: transportation has evolved Why it matters: Evolved accurately describes gradual technological change, whereas reformed does not.
- 3. Choose precise adjectives Original: more complicated and developed Suggested revision: more sophisticated and advanced Why it matters: These adjectives describe technological progress more precisely.
- 4. Use concise phrasing Original: have their own importance for people Suggested revision: are important in different ways Why it matters: The replacement expresses the comparison more naturally and concisely.
- 5. Correct the spelling Original: Plains Suggested revision: Planes Why it matters: Planes, not plains, is the intended transportation noun.
- 6. Use natural collocation Original: transportation of loads Suggested revision: transport of goods Why it matters: Transport of goods is the conventional phrase in this context.
- 7. Use natural wording Original: short-distanced places Suggested revision: nearby places Why it matters: Short-distanced is not a standard adjective for destinations.
- 8. Avoid absolute comparison Original: more optimal Suggested revision: more suitable Why it matters: Optimal is normally absolute, while suitable can be compared in this context.
- 9. Remove the extra verb Original: which is has specialised Suggested revision: that has specialised Why it matters: The clause cannot contain both is and has before the participle.
- 10. Complete the fragment Original: In particular, fast trains of modern days. Suggested revision: In particular, this applies to modern high-speed trains. Why it matters: The original fragment lacks a finite verb and a complete clause.
- 11. Use development verb Original: have been discovered Suggested revision: were developed Why it matters: Engineered trains are developed rather than discovered.
- 12. Correct the meaning Original: too fast Suggested revision: very fast Why it matters: Too fast implies excessive speed, but the sentence presents speed as an advantage.
Suggested Rewrites
- In my opinion train In my opinion, the train
- transportation has been reformed transportation has evolved
- more complicated and developed more sophisticated and advanced
- have their own importance for people are important in different ways
- Plains Planes
- transportation of loads transport of goods
Why this response received Band 5.5
The essay clearly chooses fast trains and maintains that choice through the conclusion, with speed and reduced travel time as relevant benefits. However, much of the response digresses into broad comments about other vehicles, while the case for trains is repetitive and only lightly developed; one-block organisation and frequent language errors further weaken clarity. Focus on two distinct reasons for the choice, support each concretely, and organise them into separate paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
The response answers the question with a consistent choice, but its justification relies mainly on speed and contains limited, repetitive support.
Develop two distinct reasons, such as journey-time reduction and network capacity, and explain why they make trains more significant than competing innovations.
Coherence and Cohesion
A broad progression from transportation generally to trains is visible, but repetition, a single paragraph, and occasional fragments weaken coherence.
Create an introduction, two reason-based body paragraphs, and a conclusion, removing repeated declarations of the same opinion.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts varied transportation vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate choices such as ‘plains’, ‘short-distanced’, and ‘discover a train’ reduce clarity.
Use precise terms such as ‘planes’, ‘short-distance journeys’, ‘develop high-speed trains’, and ‘technological advances’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and clause construction occur across both simple and complex sentences.
Correct core sentence patterns first, particularly perfect verb forms, articles before singular nouns, and relative clauses without duplicate verbs.
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