In most of the countries, multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
We are all surrounded by multinational companies and their products, which we feel is more trustworthy and long lasting. The tendency to promotetendency of promoting international brands is making us so dependentdependable on their products and directly impacting our finances and the value of our currencycurrency value of the country. Usually, International products are more costly thancostly compared to native brands, but they can have attractive packagingthose can have good packaging and advertising campaignsadvertisement records. Under the influence of advertisingBy the influences of ads, buyers prefer international products, though local products are of good quality and durabilitygood in quality and durability. Therefore, this increases demand for international productsit increases the requirement for international products in markets and they get higher profits and salesbetter profit and sells in our own country. HoweverYet at the part of above, multinational companies are also responsible for increasing employment in our country. They hire local people to run their businesses and companies opened in overseas. They provide chances to communicate and interact with people of different countries and to experience their lifestyle, which makes people connected all over the globe. There are many products that are not made locallynot locally built and people of a country then look for the international products. Thus people's needs changethe need for people is changed according to the products sold by the multinational companies. There are many local products which are in no way lower in quality compared to the internationally renowned products and the advertising and attractive marketing policiesadvertisement and attractive marketing policy of the multinational brands are winning over the local products. Many jobs are being createdjob markets are being created by multinational companiesthe multinational company but on the other handhands their products are also wiping out many local products as well. Therefore, I truly agree that multinational companies are damaging the quality of our life, but in some wayssome other way it is upgrading our lifestyle too. So we need to make a balance in that and promote native products as well. Being a citizen of a country we should think about own country's development, which in turnturns is our own development. After all, you reap whatever you have sown.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The essay presents a qualified view and identifies relevant benefits from multinational employment and international contact alongside harms to local products, household finances, and national development. However, its position emerges late, several claims are repetitive or only loosely explained, and frequent lexical and grammatical errors make the argument imprecise. The highest priority is to state a clear degree of agreement initially and develop two specific quality-of-life effects in separate paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A relevant qualified position and both positive and negative effects are presented, but the central quality-of-life claim is only generally developed.
Explain precisely how higher prices and declining local businesses affect daily life, then weigh those harms against employment benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a discernible movement from disadvantages to benefits and a conclusion, but one-block presentation and repeated ideas weaken progression.
Create focused paragraphs for financial and local-business harms, employment benefits, and the final extent judgement.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss brands, employment, and trade, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce clarity.
Use natural terms such as reliable, dependent on, sales, overseas operations, create jobs, outcompete local brands, and balance these effects.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent agreement, article, pronoun, and clause errors weaken control while meaning remains generally clear.
Prioritise subject-verb agreement and complete clause patterns, especially products are, advertising influences, companies create, and this in turn supports development.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In most of the countries, multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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