Some people argue that the primary purpose of natural resources, such as forests and rivers, is to support human development and economic growth. Others believe that it is essential to protect the natural environment and its wildlife, even if it restricts human activity and progress. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Whether natural resources should be used for the development or be protected has been a debated topic,debating question, This essay delves into the opposite views, providing my own opinion that we should protect the environment and we can not overuse the natural resources. There are many benefitssome of protecting the environment . First of all, the environment is the basisenvironment is the base of human lives which can not be recovered easilyesaily once destroyedonce been destroyed. For example, the Chinese people used toChinese used to focus on economy too much and they established a huge number of highly polluting industries such as iron industries. Although they achieve great development in economy, the cost ofcosting of environmental pollution is enormous. The air qualitycondition in Beijing city became bad and it was severely affected by smog. Nowadays Chinese government pays more attention to protect the environment and stopped developingstop to develop polluting industries. Thisindustries, This strategy has madestrategy make Beijing a suitable place to live again. In addition, good environment can be attractive for the tourist. For example, New Zealand government refusesrefuse to develop their natural resources and many touriststourist from other countries are attracted by its natural landscape. The tourism in this country contributes greatly tocontribute a lot about its economy and improves local people's life standard. Meanwhile, using natural resources can benefit economy. For example,economy.For example China which became the second-largest economy by these polluting industries. However, once the environment isare polluted it will be hard to recover. To sum up, I hold the viewpoint that we should protect environment which is the basis ofwhich is base of human lives and good for the tourism. Meanwhile using natural resources can be good for developing economy but it will destroy environment which can hardly be recoveredcan be hardly to recover.
Why this response received Band 5.5
文章回应了题目要求并给出了明确的个人立场,但在讨论“利用资源促进经济”这一立场时论述过于简略。写作中的最大短板在于语法和词汇准确度较低,拼写与句法错误较为频繁。建议未来加强语法基础训练,并充实对立观点的合理性论证。
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
任务回应
文章覆盖了两个阵营的观点并给出了明确立场,但对“资源应主要用于经济发展”这一侧的论述不够充分。
请均衡展开两个观点的讨论,为支持经济发展的立论段落补充更深入的理由与例证。
连贯与衔接
文章具备基本的段落分工和衔接词,但部分段落结构失衡且分句逻辑不够连贯。
合理分配主体段落字数,并多使用代词与逻辑关联词提升段落内部的流畅度。
词汇资源
文章使用了表达主题所需的基本词汇,但拼写错误和用词不当较为明显。
积累并准确运用与环保、经济相关的常见搭配,避免出现拼写和词性误用。
语法多样性与准确性
文章尝试使用了多种句型,但频繁出现时态、主谓一致、标点误用及逗号连句等语法错误。
重点练习单复数一致性与从句连接词的使用,写完后仔细检查句子的语法完整性。
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people argue that the primary purpose of natural resources, such as forests and rivers, is to support human development and economic growth. Others believe that it is essential to protect the natural environment and its wildlife, even if it restricts human activity and progress. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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