Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook, Twitter and so on) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
A large group of people believe that social networking websites and apps like Facebook, Twitter and Instagram have a largely detrimental impacthave largely a detrimental impact on individuals, society, and local communities. While I believe that these sites have some benefits for individuals, I agree that they have mostly negative impacts on local communities and society as a wholelocal communities or societies as a whole. This essay explains my position.
Social media has brought people from different countries together and enabled them to connect and communicate in an unprecedented way. Facebook groupsFacebook's social groups offer individuals the opportunity to interact with like-minded people and participate in discussions on topics of interest, whileinterest while other apps allow them to communicate with otherschat or talk with others at no additional costwithout spending extra money. These are clear advantages that social mediaonline social media has brought to individuals.
However, the effect of Facebook, Twitter and other social networking sites on societies and local communities is highly negative. Due to their influence, people are choosing to interactengage more online instead of participating in their local communities. As a result, local communities are no longer forming the strong, supportivecorroborating relationships that once existedwe used to have in the past. Society, as a whole, is becoming increasingly fragmented and disconnected as people spend more time online with people they have never met and are unlikely to meet in the future.
To conclude, while social networking sites have brought individuals closer together, they have not had the same effect on society or local communities. Local communities should take steps to involve their members in local activities to supportpromote the future of community life. Social media can continue to bring individuals together, buttogether but it is important to recognize its limitations when it comes to strengthening local communities.
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response's strongest feature is its clear, nuanced position: social networking benefits individual communication but damages participation and solidarity in local communities. This distinction is developed logically and expressed with strong control, although the discussion of individual effects is somewhat narrow and one or two word choices are imprecise. The highest priority is to test the position against a specific negative effect on individuals and explain why the benefits still outweigh it.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly addresses both individuals and society, maintains a clear qualified position, and supports it with relevant explanation.
Acknowledge and evaluate one plausible individual harm, such as isolation or distraction, to make the qualified judgment more comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress clearly through a well-focused introduction, contrasting body paragraphs, and a conclusion that accurately consolidates the argument.
Tighten the concluding recommendation so it reinforces the evaluation without introducing a new policy direction.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is flexible and precise across communication, community participation, fragmentation, and social connection, with only occasional awkward choices.
Replace corroborating relationships with supportive relationships and avoid combinations such as largely a detrimental impact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used accurately, and the few errors do not impede communication.
Refine article and adverb placement in isolated phrases while preserving the existing structural variety.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook, Twitter and so on) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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