Some businesses observe that people who just finished college have a hard time interacting with colleagues in working as a team. What do you think are the reasons behind this? What are your suggestions to address this problem?
Sample Response
Working as a team member requires some extra skills and experienceexperiences and the fresh graduates from the colleges or universities often find it hard to work efficiently as a team memberwork an efficient team member. In my opinion, this possibly happens because of the lack of professionalism and experienceprofessionalism & experiences and since new graduatesthe newly graduates switch from the university environment to a totally new job environment.
The team members of a business, most of the times work to achieve a goal and work accordingly. Experience as a team member of a large organisation is required to fully understand the responsibilities and spirit of a team. In a team, most team members work togethermost of the members work as a whole rather than working individually and sometimes have no freedom to work spontaneously. In the university environmentperimeters, students lead a free academic life and have little experience in working in a team. They are often given assignments that require more than one studentstudents to work together but this is totally different compared to working in a business organisationorganizations, because at universitybecause in the university they are mostly friends or classmates and in an office team there are superiors and fresh graduates often find themselvesthe fresh graduate often find themselves in a situation where they think they are not treated properly. They often try to implement their own ideas and as a team member, it is sometimes welcomed but not often.
There are some other reasons as well. For example, fresh graduates often think that their superiors are just trying to boss around them and show little friendlinesshave little friendly attitudes. Another reason is that switching from one environment to a completely different oneto completely different one is sometimes stressfulsome time distressful and it takes timetimes to adaptadopt to the new environment. But the college or university graduate students are often placed in a team as a member from the very beginning of their joining date. I think they should be given some time to adjust to the working environmentto adjust the working environment and to find themselves comfortable in the new environment.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response explains several plausible reasons for graduates' teamwork difficulties, especially the contrast between university and workplace hierarchies, and its ideas generally progress coherently. However, the solution side is limited mainly to giving newcomers time to adjust, while frequent awkward or inaccurate sentences reduce precision; prioritise developing two concrete workplace interventions and editing for agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The causes are relevant and reasonably developed, but the response gives only one narrow and briefly explained solution.
Add and develop concrete measures such as induction training, mentoring, or structured team projects, explaining how each addresses an identified cause.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a generally understandable progression, although the long central paragraph combines too many ideas and weakens focus.
Separate the university-workplace contrast from the discussion of hierarchy and attitudes, giving each paragraph a clear controlling idea.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for discussing teamwork and workplace adjustment, but inaccurate collocations and word forms are noticeable throughout.
Replace awkward phrases such as work an efficient team member and newly graduates with natural, correctly formed alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex forms, but frequent agreement, article, plural, and sentence-structure errors reduce control.
Break up long sentences and check every clause for a complete structure, accurate agreement, and appropriate article use.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some businesses observe that people who just finished college have a hard time interacting with colleagues in working as a team. What do you think are the reasons behind this? What are your suggestions to address this problem?
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