In many countries, there is a shortage of housing due to a growing population. Some people argue that new towns should be built in the countryside, others argue for the regeneration of cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of building new towns in the countryside?
Sample Response
With around eight billion peoplepopulation in the world, many cities have little spacespaces to accommodate the growing populationgrowing number of population and their housing. Thousands of people are moving to urban areasthe urban areas each day for better jobs, modern facilities, education and healthcare services only adding to the pressures cities already faceonly to increase the woes the cities already have. To solve housing and other pressing issuesthe housing and other pressing issues due to the rapid population growthbooming of the population, many people opine that constructionconstructions of new cities near rural areas is the best solution while others hold a different viewhave a different view on this. The second group supports regeneration of cities rather than building new towns in the countrysidenew towns close to country sides. Establishing new cities in the vicinity of the countrysidecountrysides has its advantages and drawbacks.
First of all, building new cities near the countrysides would require a huge budget. Since many underdeveloped and developed countries already have limited budgetsa scarcity of budgets even to support the basic needs of citizens, taking such initiatives would only increase their debtuplift their debts only. Besides, constructing new cities close to country sides would require destroying farmland and natural landscapesfarming lands and natural geography which wouldwill have severe consequences including deforestation and land degradationdegradation of lands. Further, such cities would be far away from the main cities and if the government fails to provide every facility that the already established cities have, people would not stay there and this possess a chance of the wastage of money in the long run. Finally, many cities already have a severe congestion problemsevere congestion problem and building such new cities near rural areas would make the situation worse as people’s need to commutepeople’s necessity for commuting to these new cities would increase.
On the other hand, careful planning and effective establishment ofaccurate planning and proper execution of establishing new cities near rural areas rather than regenerating existing cities have many merits. First of all, this would be an excellent way to solve the housing problems many cities have. If the government can ensure proper facilities in the newly constructed cities, the pressure on current cities would decrease tremendously. This would result in less traffic congestion, decentralisation, less pollution and a better standard of livingbetter life standard in both types of cities. Newly built cities would open many new job opportunitiesfacilities and that would help the adjacent rural areas to develop as well. No doubt the constructions would require a huge budget, but the government will have an excellent opportunity to control many business sectors there to earn a steady revenue. Finally, these new cities would have modern buildings and new constructions which would fight better against the natural calamities like the earthquake.
In conclusion, building new cities near rural areas is a plan that can bring many amenities both for the citizens and the government in a country. It can be an excellent way for solving housing and pollution problems in existing cities though some negative consequences of this plan should be taken into consideration.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response addresses both sides thoroughly and is organised into a clear progression, with several relevant consequences for housing, transport, employment, and the environment. Its main limitation is that frequent awkward collocations and grammatical slips reduce precision, while a few claims are only loosely explained. The highest-priority improvement is to develop fewer points more convincingly and express them through natural, accurately controlled sentence patterns.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both advantages and disadvantages are directly addressed through several relevant ideas, although some supporting logic is generalised or insufficiently convincing.
Develop fewer main points with more precise causal explanation, especially for congestion, revenue generation, and disaster resistance.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically through clear thematic paragraphs, but formulaic sequencing and some long sentences make cohesion occasionally mechanical.
Use a wider range of unobtrusive transitions and tighten internal sentence links so each paragraph builds one coherent argument.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied enough to discuss the issue in detail, but frequent unnatural collocations and word-form or number choices reduce precision.
Prioritise accurate collocations such as population growth, limited space, government debt, job opportunities, and standard of living.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is attempted and meaning remains clear, though agreement, articles, plurals, and clause control are inconsistently accurate.
Edit systematically for subject-verb agreement, countability, articles, and sentence boundaries before adding more structural complexity.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In many countries, there is a shortage of housing due to a growing population. Some people argue that new towns should be built in the countryside, others argue for the regeneration of cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of building new towns in the countryside?
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