Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
Sample Response
These days celebrities are always followed bywith journalists and fans. Some people may think that is greatSomeone can think thats great, because in this way we can know about their lives. However, in my opinion it's unhealthy behavior and even stalking, which can result infor mental problems for stars.
Firstly, it is really hard to be in front of cameras all the timeIt is really hard all time be a front of cameras everywhere. You can't go with your friends to the party or just have a cup of coffee with your family. Every move you makeEvery your moves will be recorded and notated and it can affect your healthaffect for your health. The worst factor is that famous people cannot even datewhat famous people can't even dated without news and comments about it. It is not only stars who suffer;It is not only stars suffer their partners, relatives, friends and colleagues feel this presure too. For example, Korean idols always suffer from their fans, if they start dating someoneif they start date with someone.
Secondly, I realise why media and social platforms follow celebrities so closelyso follow of celebrities. We always want to know how our idols are doinghow going our idol. A lot of information it is a great way for get better acquaintedcloser get acquainted with your favorite actor or singer. But, despite this interest,despite interesting it becomes a really big trouble where the stars like animals in a cagelike the pets in a cage. Another example, isit when famous people can't even normally arrive into airport— the photographers are already waiting for themalready wait them.
In summary, to photograph every step of a celebritystep of celeb it is sick. With time fans and media workers forget why they admireforgot what they admire of their idols and just started stalking them in every place. Like I wrote before, most of us have a favourite person, but we can't interfere withinto their personal lives.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The essay presents a clear personal opinion and addresses both sides of the debate, which is its strongest feature. However, the response is heavily limited by frequent grammatical errors and awkward word choices that occasionally obscure meaning. To improve, focus on mastering prepositional collocations and structuring complex sentences with greater accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The candidate addresses both sides of the prompt and expresses a clear position. However, some ideas are repetitive, and the development of the counter-argument (why the public is interested) is quite brief.
Ensure both sides of the argument are developed with equal depth and supported by fully explained, realistic examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, cohesive devices are sometimes used inaccurately, and paragraph transitions could be smoother.
Practice using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that referencing pronouns clearly point to their intended nouns.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for a basic discussion of the topic, but there are frequent errors in word choice, collocation, and word formation (e.g., 'follow of', 'interfere into').
Study common collocations, especially verbs followed by specific prepositions, to avoid unnatural phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is the weakest area. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, article usage, and preposition choice, which occasionally force the reader to re-read.
Focus on basic sentence structures, particularly gerunds as subjects, modal verbs, and correct prepositional phrases.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays famous people are photographed by professional photographers everywhere they go. Some people say this is a good thing because the public are interested in their lives. Other people think that photographers are wrong to follow famous people.
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