Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. You should
Sample Response
Parents can be the best teacher for every child coming on this earth. I agree with this statement as no learning institution can be compared with the parents as they are role models for their children since they open their eyes in this world till they are fully grown up and matured. To start with when the child is born he sees his parents as his guide, mentor & teacher who will teach him how to speak, eat, drink, live, wear, interact etc. No one will be with him when he is crying for anything it will be the parents who will be with him for every problem and his / her every need. Even during his education days he will observe and learn that the school although is the learning institution but the moral & ethical values learned from parents are far greater than any learning center and parents will be the one who wants the children to be the best in this world and they want their children not to repeat the mistakes that they have done in their lives which any learning institution won’t care for as they can’t give individual attention to every student. On the other hand, we see that generally the children who are orphans or could not get the attention from their parents don’t have that foundation of ethical, moral and social values as compared to the ones who have been trained by their parents despite all of them have gone to schools, colleges etc. The only difference between them is parents. If the parents are not well educated they could still prove to be good teachers for their children but that will be of less fruitful from the highly educated parents as educated and learned parents will have more vision and more horizon as compared to the unlearned. I would like to conclude with the statement that parents can be a turning point for his child if he tries to teach every step of living this life.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use the plural noun Original: teacher Suggested revision: teachers Why it matters: The complement should be plural because the subject “Parents” is plural.
- 2. Use natural wording Original: coming on this earth Suggested revision: born into this world Why it matters: This is the natural expression for a child entering the world.
- 3. Use the standard phrase Original: education days Suggested revision: school years Why it matters: “School years” is the natural expression for the period of formal education.
- 4. Correct the concession Original: the school although is the learning institution but Suggested revision: although school is a learning institution, Why it matters: “Although” should introduce the subordinate clause without the additional conjunction “but”.
- 5. Avoid the ampersand Original: moral & ethical Suggested revision: moral and ethical Why it matters: Use the full conjunction in formal academic writing.
- 6. Make the comparison logical Original: far greater than any learning center Suggested revision: far more significant than those taught by any learning centre Why it matters: The revision compares parental values with values taught elsewhere rather than with an institution.
- 7. Match the plural subject Original: parents will be the one who wants Suggested revision: parents are the ones who want Why it matters: The plural subject requires “ones,” and the present tense states the general claim directly.
- 8. Correct the collocation Original: done Suggested revision: made Why it matters: English uses the collocation “make mistakes,” not “do mistakes.”
- 9. Remove needless wording Original: generally the children Suggested revision: children Why it matters: “Generally” adds an imprecise hedge to a claim that is already framed as an observation.
- 10. Keep the time consistent Original: who are orphans or could not get Suggested revision: who are orphaned or do not receive Why it matters: Parallel present-tense forms are required for the two groups being described.
- 11. Use precise comparison wording Original: don’t have that foundation Suggested revision: may lack the same foundation Why it matters: This wording links the claim more clearly to the comparison that follows.
- 12. Use a concise comparison Original: as compared to the ones Suggested revision: compared with those Why it matters: “Compared with those” is the grammatical and concise comparative form.
Suggested Rewrites
- teacher teachers
- coming on this earth born into this world
- education days school years
- the school although is the learning institution but although school is a learning institution,
- moral & ethical moral and ethical
- far greater than any learning center far more significant than those taught by any learning centre
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay maintains a clear agreement and offers several relevant reasons, including early-life guidance, moral education, individual attention, and parental experience. Its strongest feature is sustained focus on why parents influence children's development. The main limitation is that support relies on sweeping claims, particularly about orphans, while long unpunctuated sentences weaken clarity. Prioritise balanced, specific examples and divide each main reason into a controlled paragraph.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and several relevant reasons are extended, but support is generalised and sometimes insufficiently qualified.
Develop two strongest reasons with concrete examples and avoid claiming that parental absence necessarily causes weak moral or social values.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognisable sequence, but the single-paragraph structure and several very long sentences make progression difficult to follow.
Use an introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with one central claim and clear evidence in each body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate and sometimes varied, but repetition, informal symbols, and frequent awkward collocations reduce precision.
Use 'from birth', 'moral development', 'individual attention', 'less effective', and 'broader perspective', avoiding ampersands and 'etc.'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is usually recoverable, but run-on sentences, agreement, articles, pronouns, and comparison structures contain frequent errors.
Write shorter sentences and correct forms such as 'Parents can be the best teachers', 'children learn', and 'less effective than highly educated parents'.
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