Many people believe that companies and individuals should pay to clean up the environment in proportion to the amount of pollution they have produced. To what extent to you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
It is often argued that people should be charged in accordance with the amount of pollution they produce. While I accept that certain organisations should be penalised for this, I believe that not every individual should be forcedevery individual should not be forced to pay a fine. There are several reasons why large companiesthe giant entrepreneurs should pay for contaminating the land. Having penalised with a specific amount of money factories will help the government to raise money which can be used in a variety of long-term and rationalised measures to mitigate the pollution from the earth. This will also deter them from producing more pollutiongarbage and pollution. Take London as an example, where governments have invested recently a hefty amount of money in public transportation, in particular, local buses which have been designed to be much more efficient than the older ones. So these vehicles discharge fewer harmful emissionscombustible pollutants into the air. Also, these profit-driven companiesself-centered companies sometimes exploit natural resources such as forests, water, landwater land and agricultural landlands, beyond sustainable limitsbeyond all their limits just to increase their profitsincrease the profit. If these companies are not obliged to contribute the money thatshare the amount of money, which is required to curb pollutionpollutions, they will become more short-sighted (or greedy) in terms of making more money without even caring about the their impact on the climate and the environmentimpact on climate change and environment. However, I would argue that not every individual should be liableevery individual should not be liable to pay the proposed finepay recommended fine. It is unrealistic that we can stop people from polluting the environmentuniverse merely by imposing charges. Because people need electricity to enjoy technologies, a farmland to grow crops and an accommodation to live, food to eat as well as a mean of transportation to travel. Furthermore, if people from disadvantageddevastated backgrounds are charged more for the impact they have on climate, itclimate; it will create a situation of serious hardshipan upheaval situation where lower-income groups would not be able to pay even for their daily necessities. In conclusion, organisations who are earning millions of pounds by exploiting natural resources should only be obliged to share the amount of money in curbing the pollution rather than all the common citizens.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear distinction between corporate and individual responsibility and offers several relevant reasons, with enough vocabulary and sentence variety to communicate the argument. However, it largely overlooks the question's requirement that payment be proportional to pollution, and some examples do not directly support the claims. The priority is to address proportional liability explicitly and develop each point with tightly relevant evidence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is developed on who should pay, but proportional payment is insufficiently addressed and some support is only partly relevant.
Explain directly whether both groups should pay in proportion to their emissions and use examples that demonstrate that principle.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has a generally discernible progression, but the single-paragraph presentation and occasionally loose links weaken organisation.
Separate the introduction, corporate argument, individual argument, and conclusion into purposeful paragraphs with clearer internal progression.
Lexical Resource
There is a good range of topic vocabulary, but frequent imprecise collocations such as 'giant entrepreneurs' and 'devastated backgrounds' reduce accuracy.
Choose conventional, precise expressions such as 'large corporations', 'disadvantaged households', and 'environmental remediation'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but recurring problems with articles, sentence fragments, word order, and plurals remain evident.
Prioritise complete clause structures and accurate article and noun forms, especially in longer sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people believe that companies and individuals should pay to clean up the environment in proportion to the amount of pollution they have produced. To what extent to you agree or disagree?
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