It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children. Is this a good way of providing work for others? Should people do these things themselves?
Sample Response
All things considered, different situations may happen: emergencies, unexpected plans, poor health, or even fatigue. Sometimes we can entrust our tasks and chores to someone. Admittedly, situations like this are normal. The great feeling that you can rely on someone and hope for their support. However, as I see it, you need to handle your own responsibilitiesdo all your things yourself, without someone's help. I prefer to do everything on my own and appropriately; I mean that people also should carry out their own plans independentlydo their own plans themselves.
On one hand, I'm convinced you should rely on your own way of providing for others. As far as I am concernedAs far as I think, we need to be independent, because otherwisein another way we'll be weak and dependent on others' help. For instance, I never ask for help from my family or friends, since I should do it all alone, without support, despite the challenges. That means I can live independently while still having others around me.live alone with someone beside me.
On the other hand, while some people hire help due to a lack of time, strength, or health, others rely excessively on colleaguesas opposed to people who ask for help because they don't have enough time, strength or wellness, others can use colleagues, everyone they know, and even their relatives. With time, this person will be too irresponsible and arrogant. For example, a boy who grows up in an overprotective environment, where parents always help him, at school he uses help from classmates, and continues to do so in the workplace.and with a job, the same situation.
In conclusion, I must emphasise that I'm not against help, support, or assistance; admittedly, when we need to cooperate with others to get a great result in a project, we can ask a husband or kids about household chores. DeleteOf course not; my position is that you need to complete your tasks independentlydo your job solo, but if you need advice or support, you can involveinclude someone to make this task simpler. As I have noted, getting help is not a bad thing,help — it isn't evil, but you need to do what you can yourself, because, in my opinion, it is thea main part of our development.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The essay presents a personal stance on independence, but it largely fails to address whether outsourcing tasks is a good way to provide employment for others. While the writer maintains a consistent attempt to discuss doing tasks oneself, the argument suffers from unclear progression and frequent grammatical inaccuracies. To improve, explicitly answer all parts of the prompt in the introduction and support your key points with directly relevant, well-structured examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response partially addresses the prompt by discussing doing tasks oneself, but completely omits the aspect of providing work for others.
Ensure you directly answer every question in the prompt, particularly addressing economic and employment aspects when asked.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is present, but the logical flow of ideas is disjointed and some linking expressions are used incorrectly.
Use clear topic sentences and logical transition words to connect your main points smoothly between paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is limited in range with noticeable word choice errors that occasionally cause confusion.
Focus on using topic-specific vocabulary related to employment and domestic tasks accurately rather than relying on vague expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There are frequent grammatical errors, incomplete sentences, and awkward structures throughout the text.
Practice constructing complete complex sentences with correct subject-verb agreement and preposition use.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is sometimes possible to pay somebody to do things you don't want to do, or don't have time to do, for example, household chores or looking after children. Is this a good way of providing work for others? Should people do these things themselves?
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