Increasing the price of petrol is the only way to solve environmental problems. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
These days we are facing a lot of pollution problems everywhere due to the number of vehicles are increased in road traffic. These vehicles emit polluted air and dangerous gases which adversely affecting the earth’s environment. To reduce the usage of vehicles in transport, Some Say, the government has to come up with plan hiking the petrol prices, which directly affects the usage of vehicles and which solve the problems of environmental damaging.in this essay we will discuss the agreements and disagreements.
Increasing the petrol rates will definitely help the environment as it thwarts the usage of personal vehicles and people will use public transports to travel. This helps in reducing traffic on roads. Fewer vehicles, less traffic So, Pollution can be controlled. Decrease in petrol consumption, Petrol Companies will reduce production which helps the saving petrol reserves which is costly and rarely available material.
Hiking the petrol price badly affects the common people as their pocket has to bear more money for filling the gas. Reducing personal vehicles directly Impacts the automobile industry, as sales will drop down automobile industry will face losses. In places, where there are no public transport available people, will use personal vehicles for them hiking rates of petrol will impact their monthly budgets. This empties their pockets.
As per my opinion, I could see increasing the petrol rates has its highs and lows, Government has to regulate the usage of petrol and has to encourage providing transport with all areas. Government has to do awareness campaigns to minimal usage of petrol and encourage planting the trees by doing Green campaigns. This is how we can save the deceasing environment.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use the precise noun Original: emit polluted air Suggested revision: emit pollutants Why it matters: Vehicles emit pollutants or exhaust gases rather than 'polluted air.'
- 2. Add a finite verb Original: affecting Suggested revision: affect Why it matters: The relative clause requires the finite verb 'affect.'
- 3. Use the standard phrase Original: Increasing the petrol rates will definitely Suggested revision: Increasing the price of petrol will definitely Why it matters: 'The price of petrol' is the natural expression for its cost.
- 4. Choose the right verb Original: thwarts the usage Suggested revision: discourages the use Why it matters: A higher price discourages vehicle use; 'thwarts' does not fit this construction.
- 5. Use an uncountable noun Original: transports Suggested revision: transport Why it matters: 'Transport' is uncountable when referring to a public transport system generally.
- 6. Add the determiner Original: Decrease in petrol consumption Suggested revision: With a decrease in petrol consumption Why it matters: The phrase needs a determiner and connector to introduce the consequence that follows.
- 7. Remove unnecessary capitals Original: Petrol Companies Suggested revision: petrol companies Why it matters: Common nouns should not be capitalized mid-sentence.
- 8. Repair the verb phrase Original: helps the saving petrol reserves Suggested revision: helps conserve petrol reserves Why it matters: 'Help' should be followed by the base verb here.
- 9. Fix reference and number Original: which is costly and rarely available material Suggested revision: which are costly and scarce Why it matters: The clause refers to plural reserves, so it requires 'are' and a plural-compatible description.
- 10. Use neutral wording Original: the common people Suggested revision: ordinary people Why it matters: 'Ordinary people' is more natural and neutral in formal English.
- 11. Use a human subject Original: their pocket has to bear more money Suggested revision: they have to spend more money Why it matters: People spend money; a pocket cannot literally bear money in this construction.
- 12. Use the correct expression Original: filling the gas Suggested revision: fuel Why it matters: Drivers pay for fuel rather than 'fill the gas.'
Suggested Rewrites
- emit polluted air emit pollutants
- affecting affect
- Increasing the petrol rates will definitely Increasing the price of petrol will definitely
- thwarts the usage discourages the use
- transports transport
- Decrease in petrol consumption With a decrease in petrol consumption
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response offers relevant reasons both for and against higher petrol prices, and its paragraphing makes the broad line of discussion easy to follow. However, it never gives a clear answer to the agree-or-disagree question, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors weaken precision; the priority is to state and sustain one explicit position, then support it with more fully explained evidence in accurately formed sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Relevant advantages, disadvantages, and alternatives are presented, but the required agree-or-disagree position remains unclear and ideas are only partly developed.
State a definite degree of agreement in the introduction and conclusion, and make every body point support that judgment.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is divided into purposeful paragraphs and has a discernible progression, although linking is mechanical and several run-on sentences blur relationships.
Use clearer sentence boundaries and connect each supporting point explicitly to the paragraph's main claim.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss transport and pollution, but repetition and frequent inaccurate word choices or collocations limit control.
Replace awkward phrases with precise forms such as raise petrol prices, reduce petrol use, and provide public transport.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors in clauses, agreement, articles, capitalization, and punctuation reduce accuracy and sometimes strain reading.
Prioritize complete sentence structures with one main clause, controlled subordinate clauses, and accurate subject-verb agreement.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Increasing the price of petrol is the only way to solve environmental problems. Do you agree or disagree?
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