"Tomorrow is the most important thing in our life." However, some people think that the present time is more important. How important is it for individuals and the country to think and do something for the future? What is your own opinion?
Sample Response
Planet earth is filled with love, sorrows, sufferings, thrilling moments and adventures and so on. With the passage of the time, we are falling deep into our own world and have stopped thinking about our future and generations to follow. Few people believe that our present is of vital significance, others, however, argue that we should focus more on our future. This essay will analyse both views before presenting an opinion.
Without any doubt, our present is very important as things we plan, decisions we make and measures we take now have long-term benefits to our future generations. People believe that one should do efforts to make the present time better and people should not worry about the future which no can predict to perfection. Efforts should be made to utilise the current time for the betterment of individuals and society as a whole. Moral lessons and virtuous deeds taught today will make our children valuable citizens in future. Moreover, the present time quickly becomes the past and will not be repeated. People sometimes regret not enjoying a particular moment or even more as they were busy or distracted by other things at that time.
On the contrary, few people believe that we should plan for our future as it is vital for our survival. Proponents of this viewpoint say that we should define policies and regulations to bring improvement to our core system including transportation, power distribution, air travel, housing and so on. These improvements will have significant value in future. For instance, efforts should be made to improve the education system at the grass root level so that we have more brilliant and talents students which will our future prospect. Our future not only depends on the measure and steps taken at the national level but we have to think and work on an individual basis to improve our future. Individuals should take part in community welfare service, for instance, they can take the responsibility to educate a child or provide employment to poor and needy people. These actions will make them better citizens who are the future of our society.
To recapitulate, the aforementioned provide plausible arguments in favour of both views. However, in my opinion, both present and future have equal importance as we reap in future what we sowed in the past.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Capitalise the proper name Original: earth Suggested revision: Earth Why it matters: Earth is capitalised when used as the planet's proper name.
- 2. Remove the vague ending Original: and adventures and so on Suggested revision: and adventures Why it matters: And so on is redundant after an already broad list.
- 3. Remove the article Original: passage of the time Suggested revision: passage of time Why it matters: Passage of time is a fixed expression without the definite article.
- 4. Clarify the metaphor Original: falling deep into our own world Suggested revision: becoming absorbed in our own lives Why it matters: This wording states the intended self-absorption clearly and naturally.
- 5. Use the fixed phrase Original: any Suggested revision: a Why it matters: Without a doubt is the standard idiomatic expression.
- 6. Correct the preposition Original: benefits to our future generations Suggested revision: benefits for future generations Why it matters: Benefits for a group is the natural construction when describing advantages intended for them.
- 7. Correct the collocation Original: do Suggested revision: make Why it matters: English uses make, not do, with efforts.
- 8. Add the missing pronoun Original: the future which no can predict Suggested revision: the future, which no one can predict Why it matters: No one is the required subject, and the non-defining clause needs a comma.
- 9. Use concise wording Original: the current time Suggested revision: the present Why it matters: The present expresses the same time reference more concisely.
- 10. Use precise wording Original: valuable citizens in future Suggested revision: responsible citizens in the future Why it matters: Responsible describes the intended civic quality more precisely, and in the future is the standard phrase.
- 11. Use a contrast connector Original: On the contrary Suggested revision: By contrast Why it matters: By contrast introduces the opposing viewpoint without implying that the previous statement is false.
- 12. Use the natural verb Original: define Suggested revision: devise Why it matters: Devise is the natural verb for creating policies and regulations.
Suggested Rewrites
- earth Earth
- and adventures and so on and adventures
- passage of the time passage of time
- falling deep into our own world becoming absorbed in our own lives
- any a
- benefits to our future generations benefits for future generations
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response offers a clear opinion and relevant examples of both national planning and individual action, while maintaining an understandable overall progression. Its main limitation is that substantial discussion of enjoying the present only indirectly answers how important future-oriented action is, and frequent language inaccuracies weaken precision. The priority is to organise both body paragraphs around the two actors named in the question and edit collocations and sentence grammar carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
The essay gives a clear view and relevant national and individual examples, but the extended present-versus-future discussion only partially targets the specific questions asked.
Structure the response around why future planning matters for the country and for individuals, then support each part with a developed consequence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses clear paragraphs and generally logical progression, although some ideas within paragraphs are loosely connected or repetitive.
Give each body paragraph one explicit controlling focus and link every example back to that focus.
Lexical Resource
The essay demonstrates a reasonably broad vocabulary, but recurring inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce naturalness and precision.
Replace awkward combinations such as do efforts and talents students with accurate collocations, and check singular and plural noun forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex sentences, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, clause construction, and missing words reduce control despite generally clear meaning.
Proofread each complex sentence for a complete clause structure, then check subject-verb agreement, articles, and plural endings.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
"Tomorrow is the most important thing in our life." However, some people think that the present time is more important. How important is it for individuals and the country to think and do something for the future? What is your own opinion?
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