"Tomorrow is the most important thing in our life." However, some people think that the present time is more important. How important is it for individuals and the country to think and do something for the future? What is your own opinion?
Sample Response
Planet Earthearth is filled with love, sorrows, sufferings, thrilling moments and adventuresand adventures and so on. With the passage of timepassage of the time, we are becoming absorbed in our own livesfalling deep into our own world and have stopped thinking about our future and generations to follow. Few people believe that our present is of vital significance, others, however, argue that we should focus more on our future. This essay will analyse both views before presenting an opinion.
Without aany doubt, our present is very important as things we plan, decisions we make and measures we take now have long-term benefits for future generationsbenefits to our future generations. People believe that one should makedo efforts to make the present time better and people should not worry about the future, which no one can predictthe future which no can predict to perfection. Efforts should be made to utilise the presentthe current time for the betterment of individuals and society as a whole. Moral lessons and virtuous deeds taught today will make our children responsible citizens in the futurevaluable citizens in future. Moreover, the present time quickly becomes the past and will not be repeated. People sometimes regret not enjoying a particular moment or even more as they were busy or distracted by other things at that time.
By contrastOn the contrary, few people believe that we should plan for our future as it is vital for our survival. Proponents of this viewpoint say that we should devisedefine policies and regulations to improvebring improvement to our core systems, includingour core system including transportation, power distribution, air travel, housing and so on. These improvements will have significant value in future. For instance, efforts should be made to improve the education system at the grass root level so that we have more brilliant and talents students which will our future prospect. Our future not only depends on the measuresmeasure and steps taken at the national level but we have to think and work on an individual basis to improve our future. Individuals should take part in community welfare activitiesservice, for instance, they can take responsibility for educatingtake the responsibility to educate a child or provide employment to poor and needy people. These actions will make them better citizens who are the future of our society.
To recapitulate, the aforementioned provide plausible arguments in favour of both views. However, in my opinion, both present and future have equal importance as we reap in the future what we sow in the presentwe reap in future what we sowed in the past.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response offers a clear opinion and relevant examples of both national planning and individual action, while maintaining an understandable overall progression. Its main limitation is that substantial discussion of enjoying the present only indirectly answers how important future-oriented action is, and frequent language inaccuracies weaken precision. The priority is to organise both body paragraphs around the two actors named in the question and edit collocations and sentence grammar carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay gives a clear view and relevant national and individual examples, but the extended present-versus-future discussion only partially targets the specific questions asked.
Structure the response around why future planning matters for the country and for individuals, then support each part with a developed consequence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses clear paragraphs and generally logical progression, although some ideas within paragraphs are loosely connected or repetitive.
Give each body paragraph one explicit controlling focus and link every example back to that focus.
Lexical Resource
The essay demonstrates a reasonably broad vocabulary, but recurring inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce naturalness and precision.
Replace awkward combinations such as do efforts and talents students with accurate collocations, and check singular and plural noun forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex sentences, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, clause construction, and missing words reduce control despite generally clear meaning.
Proofread each complex sentence for a complete clause structure, then check subject-verb agreement, articles, and plural endings.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
"Tomorrow is the most important thing in our life." However, some people think that the present time is more important. How important is it for individuals and the country to think and do something for the future? What is your own opinion?
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