Details of Politician’s private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Political leaders and social workers play a huge role to make society a better place to live. Few people think that the privacy of these tycoons should not be breached by citizens or media; however, I partially disagree with this, which is explained in the below composition.
On the one hand, it can not be denied that politicians are always in the limelight because of some or other reasons. Despite playing an important role, being an individual, such legislators have all rights to limit access to their personal lives. For the community, it is important to know their background, but it does not mean that the media should follow them everywhere they go. Moreover, everyone likes to have some space and loves to spend time with family. Therefore, Media houses should always be aware of what to print and whatnot. Hence, certain demographics of the society think that newspapers should not be allowed to print such contents.
On the other hand, I slightly disagree with this as there are multiple reasons and advantages behind this. Firstly, people are always keen to know about the character of their favourite leader, which cannot be known by hearing their public speeches. This is the main reason that citizens try to gather information regarding personal lives to know these lawmakers individually. Many times it has happened that people elect a leader without bothering about the background, and they eventually end up regretting the same. It is crucial that political leaders must have a crystal clear image and no criminal charges in order to lead society. Secondly, private lives printed in newspapers enlighten youngsters about their idol leader’s life story, which can inspire them to become a leader in future. For example, a recent survey in the USA states that people are always curious to know about the personal life of the presidential candidates so that it can help them to decide whom to give their precious vote. Thus, I trust that not all things, but few parts, such as education, criminal backgrounds, family, property, life story of politicians, be published.
To conclude, though there must be some restrictions, I am partially inclined towards the idea to publish the personal lives of such civil servants so that it can be helpful to society to follow a true leader.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix verb complement Original: play a huge role to make society Suggested revision: play a major role in making society Why it matters: The noun phrase 'a role' takes 'in' followed by a gerund.
- 2. Avoid unintended meaning Original: Few Suggested revision: Some Why it matters: 'Few' implies that almost nobody holds the view, whereas the intended meaning is a general group of people.
- 3. Use accurate reference Original: these tycoons Suggested revision: these public figures Why it matters: 'Tycoons' refers to wealthy businesspeople and is inaccurate for politicians and social workers.
- 4. Add definite article Original: citizens or media Suggested revision: citizens or the media Why it matters: 'The media' conventionally requires the definite article in this general reference.
- 5. Use concise signposting Original: which is explained in the below composition Suggested revision: a position explained below Why it matters: The replacement removes an unnatural phrase while retaining the forward reference.
- 6. Fix number agreement Original: life Suggested revision: lives Why it matters: The plural group of candidates requires the plural noun lives in this general reference.
- 7. Use precise phrasing Original: because of some or other reasons Suggested revision: for various reasons Why it matters: The original phrase is vague and non-idiomatic in this context.
- 8. Fix modifying phrase Original: being an individual Suggested revision: as individuals Why it matters: This plural phrase correctly refers back to 'legislators' without a dangling modifier.
- 9. Use idiomatic determiner Original: have all rights Suggested revision: have every right Why it matters: 'Have every right to' is the standard expression for entitlement.
- 10. Use formal term Original: houses Suggested revision: organisations Why it matters: 'Media organisations' is a more formal and precise term for newspaper publishers.
- 11. Clarify withholding choice Original: whatnot Suggested revision: what to withhold Why it matters: 'Whatnot' is informal and does not clearly express the editorial decision intended here.
- 12. Use accurate group term Original: certain demographics of the society Suggested revision: certain sections of society Why it matters: 'Demographics' refers to statistical characteristics rather than groups expressing an opinion.
Suggested Rewrites
- play a huge role to make society play a major role in making society
- Few Some
- these tycoons these public figures
- citizens or media citizens or the media
- which is explained in the below composition a position explained below
- life lives
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a qualified position and organizes a substantial discussion of privacy, public accountability, and voter interest. Its main limitation is that some support is generalized or only loosely connected to publishing private lives, while recurrent collocation and grammar problems reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to distinguish legitimate public-interest information from genuinely private material and develop that distinction with focused evidence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The task is addressed with a clear qualified position and relevant reasons, though some arguments are generalized or insufficiently tied to private-life publication.
Define which personal details serve the public interest and explain more precisely why each category should or should not be published.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress through a clear four-paragraph structure, but some linking is mechanical and the longer second body paragraph is not always tightly focused.
Group the reasons for disclosure more selectively and use transitions that express the exact logical relationship between ideas.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a reasonably wide vocabulary, although inaccurate collocations and unsuitable labels such as tycoons and demographics weaken precision.
Choose neutral, topic-specific terms and check common collocations related to privacy, media reporting, and public accountability.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex forms is used and meaning remains clear, but errors in articles, agreement, capitalization, and clause construction recur.
Edit complex sentences for complete clause structure and accurate agreement, especially after introductory phrases and in lists.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Details of Politician’s private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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