Even though globalization affects the world’s economy in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.
Sample Response
Globalization is a process of advancement and increase in interaction between the worlds’ countries and people. It involes in locomotion, communication, knowledge and skills. Globalazation is gaining speen over the entire world. It has attract enough world attention needed from international organization in promoting and encouraging human right and freedom, opportunities, economic, social and culture rights.
However, there are some countries that are missing out the opportunities that are offered and its taken as a big problem to their country. They are the poorer countries that are not connected to the people globally and their people are unskilled due to the lack of knowledge and equipments. They are also unable to trade with the other countries which are richer and larger as they are unable to meet the demand propose of them. They also will not have the opportunities and the challenges that are require. Globalization has also encourage crimes like the illegal drug trafficking around the world through the air, sea and land. This has involved human smuggling and stuffing it in anything they come across. This has affected a lot of problems to the country and the families of the drug addicts. This will also lead to other crimes like robbery and violence in the country.
Another negative side of globalization is the dumping of the dangerous waste to the river, sea or the ocean. This will effect the aquactic creature, contaninate the water and cause harm to the people too.
To conclude, globalization has contributed a lot to the world’s econnmics but the international organization should also not forget the poorer countries and the countries should also tackle its other negative sides that affect the world.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct possessive Original: worlds’ countries Suggested revision: world's countries Why it matters: The singular noun world needs the possessive apostrophe before s.
- 2. Correct verb form Original: involes in Suggested revision: involves Why it matters: Involve takes a direct object here, and the verb is misspelled.
- 3. Choose precise word Original: locomotion Suggested revision: transportation Why it matters: Transportation more clearly refers to the movement of people and goods in this context.
- 4. Correct spelling Original: Globalazation Suggested revision: Globalization Why it matters: The key topic word is misspelled.
- 5. Correct spelling Original: speen Suggested revision: speed Why it matters: The noun speed is misspelled.
- 6. Use past participle Original: attract Suggested revision: attracted Why it matters: The present perfect requires the past participle attracted.
- 7. Use plural noun Original: organization Suggested revision: organizations Why it matters: The general reference requires the plural form organizations.
- 8. Use plural form Original: right Suggested revision: rights Why it matters: The established general expression is human rights.
- 9. Use adjective form Original: culture Suggested revision: cultural Why it matters: The adjective cultural is needed to modify rights.
- 10. Add required preposition Original: missing out the opportunities Suggested revision: missing out on the opportunities Why it matters: The phrasal verb is miss out on something.
- 11. Clarify clause grammar Original: and its taken as Suggested revision: and this is seen as Why it matters: The replacement supplies a clear subject and correctly formed passive verb.
- 12. Use uncountable noun Original: equipments Suggested revision: equipment Why it matters: Equipment is an uncountable noun and does not take a plural s.
Suggested Rewrites
- worlds’ countries world's countries
- involes in involves
- locomotion transportation
- Globalazation Globalization
- speen speed
- attract attracted
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response has a recognizable structure and identifies several relevant disadvantages of globalization, including unequal access, crime, and environmental damage. The discussion is nevertheless unbalanced because the claimed economic benefits receive almost no explanation, while several negative links are asserted rather than developed. The priority is to explain both sides with specific cause-and-effect support, then improve sentence accuracy and topic vocabulary so the argument is easier to follow.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response discusses several negative effects, but the positive economic side is only briefly asserted and many ideas lack sufficient explanation.
Develop at least one clear economic benefit and explain how each disadvantage results from globalization before drawing the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and basic sequencing provide an overall direction, but the long central paragraph contains loosely connected claims and unclear references.
Give each major effect its own paragraph and use explicit topic sentences and cause-and-effect links to guide the reader.
Lexical Resource
There is enough topic vocabulary to discuss trade, crime, and pollution, but frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word combinations limit clarity.
Check high-frequency topic words and learn accurate combinations such as economic growth, meet demand, hazardous waste, and water contamination.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex sentences, but frequent errors with verb forms, agreement, articles, plurals, and pronouns reduce control.
Review each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb, then check agreement and article use systematically.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Even though globalization affects the world’s economy in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.
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