Some people think that modern technology has more negative effects on our lives than positive ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
The 21st century has already seen considerable progress in technology. It is true that this technological progressthis improvement in technology has revolutionised our lives. However, I believe that this has more negatives harms than benefits on individual's life. In this essay, the ways in which technological developmentthe manner in which development of technology has affected communication and employment opportunities will be analysed. To begin with, people nowadays are more dependent on electronic devicesdependent on the electronic devices to communicate with othersfor communicating with others. A good illustration offor this is the messaging application WhatsAppthe recent innovation of the ‘Whatsapp’ which provides a way to send messages free of chargean alternative for sending messages free of charge. Although this innovation has eased the means of communication it is nowhere compared to the face-to-face communication and it lacks the feeling of closeness. Thus, the link between technological advances and declining communication skillsthe link between improved technology and degraded communication skills can be seen. In addition, advancesadvancement in technology has resulted in machines replacing peopleresulted in replacing people with the machines inat various workplaces. For instance, the existence of labour-saving devices such as dishwasher, washing machine and vacuum cleaner acts as a substitute for the house-maids causing the rise in the unemployment. Because of this, individuals have to relydepend on the government for their basic needs and thus the national economy suffersthe economy of the country is affected. Therefore, the negative implications for employmentnegative implications on the work status as well as the wider economythe economy of the society are clear. From the above examples, it is difficult to denydebunk that technological advances have harmed people's livesafflicted the peoples' lives. It is thus hoped that the elected representatives will take measures to minimise the useusage of technology in certain places for society's well-beingthe well-being of the society.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear negative position and follows a logical sequence through communication and employment examples. Its main limitation is that the second argument relies on a questionable connection between household appliances and broad unemployment, while frequent awkward collocations, article errors, and the lack of paragraphing reduce precision and readability. Prioritise developing better-supported causal arguments in distinct paragraphs and editing sentences for natural grammatical control.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear position and two relevant negative effects, but the employment argument is only partly convincing and remains insufficiently supported.
Use a stronger workplace-automation example and explain each causal link carefully to substantiate the claimed social consequences.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has a recognisable introduction, two-part progression, and conclusion, but the absence of paragraphing and mechanical linking weaken organisation.
Divide the response into clear paragraphs and use transitions that show how each example supports the central position.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for the topic and some less common language, but frequent word-form and collocation errors make expression awkward.
Correct combinations such as negative harms, benefits on an individual's life, and difficult to debunk, favouring simpler precise wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response mixes simple and complex structures, but recurring article, agreement, possessive, and punctuation errors limit accuracy.
Proofread noun phrases and clause boundaries, especially articles, plural forms, possessives, and commas in longer sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that modern technology has more negative effects on our lives than positive ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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