Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Sample Response

1

It is opined by many that poverty is the primary cause of most crimes. I agree with this opinion and believe that poverty is positively correlated with crimepoverty positively correlates with crimes because it restricts access to fundamental resources and also creates a vicious circle.

2

Poverty encourages criminal behaviourbehaviours by limiting access to resources. To put it simply, poverty places constraints on access to basic resources, includingresources; for instance, housing, healthcaretreatment, education and employment. And when people are deprived of quality education and employment opportunities, they are faced with bleak prospects for upward social mobilitya bleak future for upward social mobility. This, in turn, drives them to desperationdespair, desperation, and an increased likelihood of becoming involved in illegal activitieslikelihood of involving in illegal activities. For example, individuals living on the brink of destitution may resort to criminal activities as a means of survival.

3

Similarly, destitution perpetuates crimecrimes by creating a vicious cycle of poverty and crime. Poverty, in fact, can create a cycle of intergenerational deprivationa circle of generational deprivation, where children born into poverty-stricken families tend to suffer from a range of disadvantages, including limited educational and job opportunities, exposure to substance abuse and violence, and a lack of role modelsand lack of role models. In turn, this leads individuals to engage in criminal activities, thereby perpetuating poverty. In simple words, deprived individuals are more likely to be involved in criminal activities, leading to legal penalties that further perpetuate their povertylegal punishments that further continue their poverty. People with criminal records, for instance, usually face severe difficulty finding a job, which can drive them to a continuing cycle of poverty and crimea continued circle of poverty and crime.

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To conclude, I believe that poverty is a major contributor to crime as it restricts basic resources and creates a continued cycle of poverty and crime. However, governments should provide deprived individuals with easy access to quality education, healthcare and employment opportunities to break the nexus between poverty and crime.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 8.0

The response's strongest feature is its sustained causal argument, moving from restricted access to education and employment into a convincing cycle linking poverty, crime, punishment, and continued deprivation. The main limitation is some repetition of the cycle and a few awkward grammatical or lexical choices. The highest priority is to make the second causal strand more concise and precise while briefly acknowledging why poverty may not explain every category of crime.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

8.0
Scoring rule

A clear position is fully developed through two relevant causal mechanisms and supported with specific, persuasive examples.

Next step

Briefly qualify the claim by distinguishing poverty-related crime from offences driven by other motives, while maintaining the stated position.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

8.0
Scoring rule

The essay progresses logically from immediate resource deprivation to an intergenerational cycle, with focused paragraphs and clear referencing.

Next step

Reduce repetition of poverty and crime in the second body paragraph by using tighter references to the established cycle.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.5
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is flexible and precise across deprivation, social mobility, criminal behaviour, and policy, with only occasional awkward combinations.

Next step

Use natural phrases such as likelihood of becoming involved, perpetuates crime, and cycle of deprivation instead of less precise variants.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.5
Scoring rule

A wide range of complex structures is handled well, although a few verb-pattern and sentence-opening errors remain.

Next step

Correct isolated patterns such as likelihood of being involved and integrate clauses beginning with And into complete sentences.

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