More and more people today are using computers and electronic devices to access information. Therefore there is no longer any need to print books, magazines or newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
In the past, only limited ways were available to access information such as newspaper, magazine and so on. In modern scenario, with the passage of time and advancement in technology use of electronic gadgets is increasing rapidly in order to access information. Despite this, it is agreed that in the foreseeable future print media will disappear and computer, mobile phones will be used by masses because computer provides fast, convenient service as well as accurate information. Firstly, accessing information online provides us comfort as masses can use it at anyplace and anytime within few seconds. For instance, today with the help of search engine like Google, Bing and so on accessing information has become more convenient than the past. Individuals just need to enter a keyword in search box about one particular object and whole the information will be in the front of their eyes within seconds like if anybody enters Apple iPhon Google search box then whole the detail of establishing apple company and products will be on their smartphone screen. Thus, this makes it clear that print media is not going to be operational anytime in the near future. Secondly, on print media getting latest information is slow rather than electronic devices. For example, a few months ago when Malaysian airplane was crashed then information about it was available on the same day on the internet as well as television but on print media, it was available after one day. Moreover, on Wikipedia individual can get information about past centuries and about every celebrity, which is tough to find in print media and showing information by Wikipedia is accurate and really tough to deny. In summary, electronic gadget helps masses to keep updated with the latest invention. Thus, it is a clear use of print media in order to access information is an idea that will not be realised anytime soon. It is predicted that print media will be replaced by these devices.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add quantity structure Original: only limited ways were available Suggested revision: only a limited number of ways were available Why it matters: The countable plural ways needs a quantity phrase such as a limited number of.
- 2. Use plural examples Original: newspaper, magazine and so on Suggested revision: newspapers, magazines, and similar print media Why it matters: The examples refer to publication types in general and should be plural.
- 3. Use natural time phrase Original: In modern scenario Suggested revision: In the modern era Why it matters: In the modern era is the idiomatic expression for the present technological period.
- 4. Clarify noun phrase Original: advancement in technology use Suggested revision: advances in technology, the use Why it matters: A comma and explicit noun phrase are needed to separate the introductory cause from the subject.
- 5. Coordinate plural nouns Original: computer, mobile phones Suggested revision: computers and mobile phones Why it matters: Both device types are general plurals and should be joined with and.
- 6. Add definite article Original: by masses Suggested revision: by the masses Why it matters: The fixed collective expression is the masses.
- 7. Fix number agreement Original: because computer provides Suggested revision: because computers provide Why it matters: The generic count noun should be plural and take the plural verb provide.
- 8. Choose precise noun Original: service Suggested revision: access Why it matters: Access describes the benefit of obtaining information more precisely than service.
- 9. Use natural expression Original: provides us comfort Suggested revision: is convenient Why it matters: Is convenient states the benefit directly and avoids the unnatural provides us comfort.
- 10. Clarify causal link Original: as masses Suggested revision: because people Why it matters: Because makes the causal relationship explicit and people is more natural in this context.
- 11. Fix adverbial phrase Original: at anyplace and anytime Suggested revision: anywhere and at any time Why it matters: Anywhere is the correct adverb of place, while at any time needs a preposition.
- 12. Add missing article Original: within few seconds Suggested revision: within a few seconds Why it matters: The quantifier few requires the article a in this meaning.
Suggested Rewrites
- only limited ways were available only a limited number of ways were available
- newspaper, magazine and so on newspapers, magazines, and similar print media
- In modern scenario In the modern era
- advancement in technology use advances in technology, the use
- computer, mobile phones computers and mobile phones
- by masses by the masses
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response presents a consistent view that electronic sources will replace print and supports it with relevant points about convenience, speed, and breadth of access. However, the discussion becomes repetitive, some examples are asserted rather than analysed, and frequent language errors blur several claims. The most important improvement is to organise two distinct reasons, explain each carefully, and express the comparisons in shorter, grammatically controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear and relevant reasons are provided, though their development is uneven and occasionally repetitive or questionable.
Explain how each advantage removes the need for print, using one concise and credible example for each main point.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a generally logical order, but paragraphing is absent and linking is sometimes mechanical or imprecise.
Divide the response into clear paragraphs and use topic sentences to distinguish convenience from speed and range of information.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss technology and information access, but frequent collocational and word-form errors limit accuracy.
Replace awkward phrases with precise expressions such as access information anywhere, obtain current news, and printed publications.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, clauses, and comparison structures reduce control.
Use shorter sentence units and systematically check articles, singular-plural agreement, and comparative forms before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
More and more people today are using computers and electronic devices to access information. Therefore there is no longer any need to print books, magazines or newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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