Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
It is a common issue to deal with offenderscope with wrongdoers in society and how to redesign the existing prison system is debated by various groups of peopleis argued by several groups of people. Some people suggest that we may provide them with training and workprovide training and work for them to adjust their behaviour and I partially agree with it. First of all, it is a positive method to encourage wrongdoers and train them to live ain normal life. Also, it will develop their abilities and mindsetstimulate their ability and mind to rehabilitate and even adjust their attitude. In this case, a supportive environment is createda friendly environment is well set and it may profoundlywholly affect their lives for a long time. Second, society may take advantage of the period of training and studystudying which may help reducewhich may result in reducing the crime raterate of crime committing. Education is the root cause of such problems and that will be a wonderful chance to deal with it. However, this policy may not benefithave benefits on the convicts who havehad committed a serious and unforgivable crime. The convicts who are in jail and taken away from their basic human rightsright deserve their punishmentsin. And they are not capable of such treatment or schemesany treatment and scheme like these which are seen as an indulgence at the expense of taxpayers and victimsenjoyment to taxpayers or even a victim. Given this concernWith such concern, I suggest that it should be planned with a clear system for classifying crimesa clear level of crime system to evaluate their crime. Thus, different levels will give different levels of tasks and workdegrees of tasks and works and also eliminate citizens' doubt and worry. In conclusion, it is a controversial issue to consider a new and simple change of existing prison system. In my opinion, given the level crime of the system and apply to the scheme, it will be better and has positive and certain influence in both society and wrongdoers.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response has a relevant, discernible position and usefully distinguishes between offenders who may benefit from rehabilitation and those convicted of serious crimes. Its main limitation is that the supporting ideas remain general and sometimes unclear, while pervasive awkward phrasing weakens precision. The highest-priority improvement is to explain the proposed crime-level system with a concrete example and express each claim in simpler, more accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the question with a qualified position and relevant arguments for rehabilitation and differentiated treatment, though key ideas remain insufficiently explained.
Develop the proposed classification of crimes with a specific example showing who should receive training and why.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses through clear stages and uses signposting, but the single-block presentation and mechanical linking weaken paragraph-level organisation.
Separate the introduction, supporting arguments, qualification, and conclusion into purposeful paragraphs with clearer logical connections.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss crime and rehabilitation, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Prefer natural combinations such as reduce crime, serve a sentence, and rehabilitation programme, and check each key phrase for accurate usage.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence structures, but recurring errors in articles, agreement, clause construction, and word forms make several sentences awkward.
Use shorter controlled sentences and systematically check subject-verb agreement, articles, and verb forms before adding complex clauses.
Write this task while it is fresh
Try the same task now. It helps you remember the feedback and write better next time.
IELTS Writing Task 2
Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.