Parents, who send their children to private school, should not be required to pay education tax. Do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Tax is aiding to creep the authority revenue by the direct or indirect ways from the public. Tax is collected by various modes such assuch as- by tollTool tax, educationEducational tax and so on. It is believed that guardiansguardian should not be required to pay education tax if they senddisburse education tax who send their children to private schools. I agree with this viewI accede to this interpretation that parents should not pay the tax if they sendpay tax who send their children to private schools because they already make a sacrifice by spendingsacrifice by spending a huge amount on school feesin schools as a fee for their children's education. For instance, in Canada, the private schools or universities chargeprivate school or university want substantial feesa big chunk of money from guardians who want higher educationeducations for their children. So they should not make a further sacrificedo more sacrifice by paying education taxtaxes. On the other hand, it is believed that all people are equal, nobody is different to each other so all people have a responsibility to pay tax as an equality. Moreover, we know that the tax money is used in the government schools for covering the education of students, authority schools can also provide a higher education to students in private schools. In additionIn addition to, we also pay an emergency tax for fire brigade or ambulance. As evidence, fortunate, some people do not use this help in their lives but they pay this tax so, as this all parents should be paid education tax even they send their children to private schools. To sum up, I strongly believe that parents using private schools should not have to pay the taxall parents should not be pay tax because they already pay huge money to schools. I think as the burden of payingpay education tax, the students are unable tostudents cannot able to concentrate in their study.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The essay gives a recognizable position that parents using private schools should be exempt and offers the relevant reason that they already pay substantial fees. It also considers the opposing principle that everyone contributes to shared public services. However, the argument becomes inconsistent and difficult to follow, especially around how tax funds benefit private-school families, while frequent vocabulary and grammar errors obscure meaning. Prioritize one coherent justification supported by clear sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A position and two relevant perspectives are present, but support is limited, some claims are illogical, and the final concentration point is not convincingly connected to the issue.
Choose two clear reasons for exemption and explain how each directly affects fairness or public funding.
Coherence and Cohesion
Basic progression from support to opposition and conclusion is visible, but the single paragraph, run-on sentences and mechanical connectors make relationships difficult to follow.
Use separate paragraphs for the position, one supporting reason, the counterargument and the conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a range of tax and education vocabulary, but frequent incorrect choices such as 'creep revenue' and 'do more sacrifice' reduce clarity.
Use common precise terms such as 'raise government revenue', 'pay school fees' and 'contribute to public services'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in agreement, passive forms, articles and clause joining sometimes make sentences hard to interpret.
Build shorter complete sentences and check core forms such as 'parents should pay' and 'students cannot concentrate'.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Parents, who send their children to private school, should not be required to pay education tax. Do you agree or disagree?
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