Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that's why the use of public transportation is encouraged. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

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Transportation playsTransportation is playing an important role in every nation's development process and it is essential to our mobilitythis is an important aspect of our life for mobility. Some people believe that private cars areprivate car is the best meansmean of transportation while others say that public transport service should be used for this purpose. However, as far as I am concerned, I firmly agree that public transport service should be our main meansmean of transportation. The advantages and demerits of using public transportation are discussed in this essay.

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The very first advantage of using public transportation service is that it reducesreduced the burning of fossil fuel. We all know that fuels like petrol and diesel take millions of years to formtake million of years to make. Therefore, ifTherefore if we do not decrease the usage level of these fuels then in future it will be diminished. So to make sure that this will not happen in the futureit will not happen in future, we need to save these fuels as much as possible. The very first step towards it is the usage of public transport service. Since public transporta public transportation can carry a large number of passengers, it reducespassengers it reduced the overall fuel consumption. Thus it helps to reduce air pollution and environmental damagethe air and environmental pollutions.

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Secondly, more pollution will be generated if we opt to use private cars for transportation. The more privatepersonal cars on the road, the more pollution theyit will generate. So if we use buses or trains for traveluse bus or train for roaming then we can fulfil our part to reduce environmental pollutiondecrease the environmental pollutions. Further, public transport costs lesstransportation cost is cheaper in the case of public transportation. Another aspect is the accident risk. In private cars, the risk of an accident on the roadprobability of accident on road has increased dramatically. Last but not least, public transportation increases your social contacts. Your social circle will expandYour social life will scatter with the use of government transport service.

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Every coin has two sides and that is true for the usage of public transportation as well. Firstly, public buses or trains take more time to travel to some place. It does not take any shortcuts and also runs in limited speed. On the other hand, with a private car, you can go to any place in a very short time. Secondly, public transport service is limited. One has to make sure that he/she has the timetable of public buses or trains. If one does not have timing record, then it generates some hurdles for the travellers. There is little privacy on public transportation and you can’t relax in a crammed public bus or train. All in all, I would conclude by saying that public transport service has more advantages than its disadvantages. Further, I like to suggest that buses or trains should be our main modes of transportationshould our main transportation types. Private cars should be used for urgent needs only. Otherwise, public transportations should be used. It will save our environment.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response clearly covers several advantages and disadvantages and maintains a consistent preference for public transport. Its main weakness is that ideas are often repetitive or asserted without convincing development, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors make the expression awkward. The highest-priority improvement is to select fewer points, explain each with a precise cause-and-effect chain, and proofread agreement, tense, and noun forms.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.5
Scoring rule

The response addresses both advantages and disadvantages and states a clear view, but several points are repetitive, brief, or insufficiently justified.

Next step

Develop two strong advantages and two strong disadvantages with specific explanations rather than listing loosely supported claims.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The essay has a clear overall structure and generally logical sequencing, though cohesion becomes mechanical and the advantages section repeats pollution-related material.

Next step

Group overlapping environmental points into one developed paragraph and use referencing to reduce repeated phrases such as public transportation service.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

There is adequate topic vocabulary, but frequent awkward collocations, word-form errors, and inaccurate plural forms limit precision.

Next step

Use natural expressions such as means of transport, reduce fuel consumption, and environmental pollution, checking countable and uncountable nouns carefully.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

The response attempts varied sentence forms, but recurring errors in tense, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are noticeable throughout.

Next step

Prioritize consistent present tense and subject-verb agreement, then check articles and missing auxiliaries in every sentence.

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Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that's why the use of public transportation is encouraged. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

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