The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognised as increasing numbers of species come under threat.
Sample Response
Today, the number of species threatened with extinctionunder extinction threat is increasing and that showsis showing us the importance of biodiversity. Fortunately, it is not too late to maintain biodiversity. With small but effective changes we can save many species. First of all, reducing water pollutionreducing the water pollution can create a great reliefrelieve for aquatic specieson water species. According to biologistsAccording to the biologists, 80%the 80 % of all existing creatures are living in the water. Water Pollution is reducing the diversity and populationskinds and population of those creaturesthat creature day by day.
Chemical and biological waste continues to pollutewastages are kept polluting fresh water reserves and seas. For example every year a million gallonsgallon of polluted water was discharged into the rivers and the searivers and sea in Istanbul. Because thereBecause, there were no sewer treatment facilities in Istanbul, the sea became too polluted and there was nearly no underwater life. After government decided and build sewer treatment facilities,
Water reserves and sea have become clearer and it has a great impact on biodiversity. Today curious eyes can even see the dolphins in there. Another measurecaution for maintaining biodiversity is forestation. Today most of the land creatures are need forests for living and forestation can create new living areas for many kinds of creatures, especially for mammals. The best example of it is the city of Abu Dhabi. İn the seventies, Emirate of Abu Dhabi decided to create a forest in the desert. After a well-organised forestation plan, they managed to create a forest and today it is a great aattraction for peoplettraction point to people who want to see the forest habitat. There are many kinds of creatures from mammals to endemic insects. As a result, today extinction is a great threat to many species. The pollution caused by people and deforestation causes great risks for many kinds of species. On the other hand, it is not too late for many of them. WWith small actionsith small action, we can prevent the extinction of a lot of species and we can maintain the biodiversity.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a relevant focus on protecting biodiversity and supports two practical measures with concrete examples. However, frequent grammatical and lexical errors, along with disrupted paragraph boundaries, reduce precision and make parts of the argument awkward to follow. Prioritise accurate sentence construction and organise each solution into a complete, clearly separated paragraph before refining the examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear general position and develops two relevant solutions, but some supporting claims are imprecise and not fully persuasive.
Explain more explicitly how each proposed measure protects threatened species and avoid unsupported numerical or geographical claims.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall sequence from water protection to forestation is understandable, but paragraph breaks split sentences and combine distinct stages of the essay.
Give the introduction, each main solution, and the conclusion their own complete paragraphs with controlled internal progression.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss environmental causes and solutions, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce naturalness.
Replace expressions such as extinction threat, water species, and another caution with precise, conventional environmental vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains mostly clear, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries limit grammatical control.
Practise building complete complex sentences and systematically check subject-verb agreement, articles, plurals, and past-tense forms.
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The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognised as increasing numbers of species come under threat.
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