Public transport is essential but problematic. Describe some of the problems connected to public transport and suggest some solutions.
Sample Response
It is true that using of various transport systems, supported by the government, including the public transportation is extremely important for many people living in urban or rural areas. Undeniably, citizens have faced numerous issues when it comes to commuting between their home and destination, including accessibility or quality. While public transports are very important to reduce the number of private cars running in the cities, it has some disadvantages as well. I personally believe that these problems can be addressed with some pragmatic solutions.
The first important factor why the public are not interested in using buses or trains is the lack of availability. Unfortunately, many inhabitants living outside of central cities cannot usually find adequate buses or monorails. In particular, in the Northshore areas of Vancouver city of Canada, individuals cannot easily travel by Skytrain because there is no any train station there. Had the government of BC extended this type of transport, more dwellers would have accessed it. As a result, to find better solutions to this issue, public transportation must equally be reachable to all citizens living even in remote areas.
Another reason is the poor quality this method of transport has. Obviously, in many highly populated poor countries, this type of transportation has considerably deteriorated. As a prime example, in Iran, the lifetime of some buses backs to over thirty years or more, and their capacity is not as much as used to be. Many passengers have to stand on their feet all over their travelling because of the shortage of spaces, and there is no any specific seat for children or equipped facilities for elders which many modern buses have. To address it, the state administrations are better to increase the budget of public transport and renew the old buses or trains, which have endangered people’s safety.
The public buses in many areas do not have fixed timetable and people have to wait for a long to get on a bus. Apart from that, privacy is another concern for people. When public transportation system is very effecting in reducing congestion and air pollution, these two aspects often deter people to use them. Improving the service quality and imposing strict rules by the authority could be an effective solution to this problem.
To sum up, public transportation is being used by many of citizens in each country though who can afford private cars usually avoids public transportation. However, it is important to encourage people to use public transportation more to reduce the traffic jam and pollutions. From my perspective, to solve the problems like quality or accessibility, transport authorities have to increase the number of public vehicles in all over the country and replace the old transport systems with the modern ones with better facilities and regulations.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use noun construction Original: using of various transport systems Suggested revision: use of various transport systems Why it matters: The gerund using cannot take of in this noun phrase.
- 2. Remove unnecessary article Original: the public transportation Suggested revision: public transport Why it matters: Public transport is normally uncountable and does not take the here.
- 3. Match plural citizens Original: their home and destination Suggested revision: their homes and destinations Why it matters: The plural possessors refer to multiple individual origins and destinations.
- 4. Use uncountable subject Original: public transports are Suggested revision: public transport is Why it matters: Public transport is an uncountable singular concept.
- 5. Use reason collocation Original: first important factor why Suggested revision: first important reason why Why it matters: Reason why is the natural phrase for explaining reluctance to use services.
- 6. Format place name Original: Vancouver city of Canada Suggested revision: Vancouver, Canada Why it matters: The city and country are named directly with a comma.
- 7. Remove double determiner Original: there is no any train station Suggested revision: there is no train station Why it matters: No already supplies the negative determiner, so any is redundant.
- 8. Use accessibility collocation Original: must equally be reachable Suggested revision: must be equally accessible Why it matters: Services are accessible to residents rather than reachable to them in this context.
- 9. Use complete noun phrase Original: poor quality this method of transport has Suggested revision: poor quality of this mode of transport Why it matters: The of phrase forms a grammatical complement to quality.
- 10. Describe vehicle age Original: the lifetime of some buses backs to over thirty years or more Suggested revision: some buses are over thirty years old Why it matters: The original phrase combines an incorrect verb with redundant time wording.
- 11. Complete capacity comparison Original: not as much as used to be Suggested revision: lower than it used to be Why it matters: The comparison requires a subject and the adjective lower for capacity.
- 12. Use journey collocation Original: stand on their feet all over their travelling Suggested revision: stand throughout their journeys Why it matters: The replacement expresses the full duration naturally and concisely.
Suggested Rewrites
- using of various transport systems use of various transport systems
- the public transportation public transport
- their home and destination their homes and destinations
- public transports are public transport is
- first important factor why first important reason why
- Vancouver city of Canada Vancouver, Canada
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay identifies several relevant public-transport problems and pairs the central concerns of access and ageing vehicles with workable government responses. The overall progression is clear, but later ideas such as privacy and timetables receive vague solutions, while frequent article, agreement, countability, and collocation errors make many sentences awkward. Prioritise fully explaining one solution per problem and edit sentence structures for accuracy and concision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
The response addresses both parts of the task with relevant problems and solutions, although the timetable and privacy points are briefly explained and matched with vague remedies.
For each additional problem, explain its practical impact and propose a specific, clearly linked solution.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main ideas are arranged in a logical problem-and-solution sequence, but repetition, loose referencing, and an overextended final body paragraph reduce cohesion.
Give the timetable and privacy issues separate, fully connected treatment or omit the less developed point.
Lexical Resource
There is enough range to discuss transport policy, but frequent inaccurate combinations such as ‘lifetime backs to’, ‘shortage of spaces’, and ‘very effecting’ weaken precision.
Use standard collocations such as ‘date back’, ‘lack of space’, and ‘effective at reducing congestion’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The writer attempts varied and complex sentences, but frequent errors with articles, agreement, countability, prepositions, and clause structure make expression awkward despite generally clear meaning.
Edit each sentence around one clear subject and verb, then check articles and singular-plural agreement systematically.
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