People living in the twenty-first century generally have a better quality of life than people who lived in previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
As we have already stepped into the 21st century, it is inevitably true that enormous changes such as advanceschanges like advances in technology, healthheath care, and transportation have brought enormous improvementswill bring enormous improvement in the quality of life of people compared to the previousolder centuries. This essay will highlight some of the quality of life improvements in the medical and transportation fieldsfield in the modern era. Development in the medical field has made the biggest impact on the lives of people in the modern era. To start with, diagnosis of severe diseases is straightforward as a consequence of advanced medical equipmentadvanced technological apparatuses and innovative devices. Secondly, finding a cure to a deadly flu or virus is less complicated in the twenty-first century, this is due to the constant research done by the scientists and having a flexible means of communication between the researchers of different countries. Lastly, the percentage of peoplethe percentage of the people dying from illnessesdying to medical illness has decreased significantlyhas significantly reduced over the decades, due to the advances made in the medical field, hence improving the quality of life for people. Another visible quality of life improvement has occurred in transportationhas been done in the transportation field through technological advancements. In the modern era, millions of people are travelling daily from one continent to anotherfrom one continent to the other in a matter of hoursin matter of hours. Travelling is faster, more reliable and cheaper today than it was a decade agocompared to a decade ago. Additionally, the advancements in transportation havehas enabled people fromof all over the world to experience diverse cultures, thereby improvingdiversity and different cultures improving and enhancing their quality of life. In, humans in the modern era experience a richer quality of life thanthen the people who walked the earth in previous centuries. Through the extensive researchvigorous experiments and knowledge left behind by our ancestors, there hashave been constant development in every field to make life easier and more pleasant for everyone.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear agreement and develops two relevant areas of improvement, with the medical discussion providing the strongest support. Its effectiveness is reduced by the absence of paragraph breaks and by recurring problems with sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and word choice. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the introduction, each main idea, and the conclusion into distinct paragraphs, then edit each sentence for grammatical accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear viewpoint and develops relevant benefits in health care and transportation with supporting explanation.
Develop the transportation argument with a more specific explanation of how faster and cheaper travel improves everyday life.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognisable sequence, but the entire response appears as one paragraph and some linking is mechanical.
Separate the introduction, two main ideas, and conclusion into clear paragraphs with focused topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for the topic, though repetition and awkward combinations such as references to older centuries reduce precision.
Replace repeated general terms with accurate collocations for historical comparison, health outcomes, and international travel.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are attempted successfully at times, but agreement, article, preposition, punctuation, and sentence-boundary errors recur.
Check each long sentence for a single clear main clause and correct agreement before adding subordinate detail.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
People living in the twenty-first century generally have a better quality of life than people who lived in previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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