An increase in the recycling material such as paper, cans and plastic has been noticed worldwide. Why do you think is this happening? What can be done to encourage recycling among people?
Sample Response
It is the 21st century. This is a modern epoch and in this epoch, there are many challenges being faced by the human. This is particularity true in the case of an increase in the waste material such as plastic, cans and paper create a hindrance in the whole world. Nowadays, many people are aware of recycling which help to curb this problem by reused the material. I will discuss, why this is happening, what we can do to resolve this issue and finally how people can be encouraged for recycling before drawing a logical conclusion. To begin with, in my perspective, the first and foremost point about creeping the recycling is trash into cash. It means that waste products are sold by people for some cash, which helps to lead the recycling. For instance, in Japan, many people sell the waste product such as empty cans or useless plastic to workers, who collect the waste material for recycling. Moreover, some people are aware of recycling, which helps to curb or tackle the problem, which is created by a non-biodegradable product such as plastic. Secondly, there are various ways to encourage the people about recycling such as awareness, which is an incredible way to encourage people. The government should spread the awareness about recycling to people by advertising. They should show the advertisement on television, magazine and newspaper because the majority of people can easily notice the issue by such media. As evidence, in Canada, the advertisement about recycling is shown on television or newspaper by the government once in a year, which helps to increase awareness among people. To sum up, after looking at above paragraphs, it is believed that the government should alert the people by advertising.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use collective noun Original: by the human Suggested revision: by humanity Why it matters: “Humanity” is the appropriate collective term for people generally.
- 2. Remove incorrect comma Original: discuss, why Suggested revision: discuss why Why it matters: A comma must not separate the verb from its content clause.
- 3. Use infinitive complement Original: encouraged for recycling Suggested revision: encouraged to recycle Why it matters: “Encourage” takes an object followed by a to-infinitive.
- 4. Correct preposition Original: in Suggested revision: from Why it matters: The fixed expression is “from my perspective.”
- 5. Clarify intended increase Original: creeping the recycling Suggested revision: increasing recycling Why it matters: “Creeping” does not express encouraging more recycling in this construction.
- 6. Use gerund phrase Original: is trash into cash Suggested revision: is turning trash into cash Why it matters: The complement needs an activity noun phrase headed by a gerund.
- 7. Use concise passive Original: sold by people for some cash Suggested revision: sold for money Why it matters: The agent is unnecessary, and “money” is more natural than “some cash” here.
- 8. Use correct causal phrase Original: helps to lead the recycling Suggested revision: helps promote recycling Why it matters: The original verb combination is not idiomatic.
- 9. Use plural before examples Original: product Suggested revision: products Why it matters: The examples refer to more than one waste item.
- 10. Use waste-material term Original: useless Suggested revision: discarded Why it matters: “Discarded” identifies plastic waste more precisely than “useless.”
- 11. Use concise passive phrase Original: problem, which is created by a non-biodegradable product Suggested revision: problem caused by non-biodegradable products Why it matters: The replacement removes the unnecessary relative clause and uses a plural generalization.
- 12. Use correct complement Original: encourage the people about recycling Suggested revision: encourage people to recycle Why it matters: “Encourage” takes a person followed by a to-infinitive.
Suggested Rewrites
- by the human by humanity
- discuss, why discuss why
- encouraged for recycling encouraged to recycle
- in from
- creeping the recycling increasing recycling
- is trash into cash is turning trash into cash
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response addresses both questions and gives relevant examples of financial incentives and public advertising, with the Japanese recycling-for-cash example providing the strongest support. Its main limitations are narrow development, heavy repetition, a single-block structure, and frequent language errors. Prioritise explaining multiple causes of increased recycling and propose distinct measures such as convenient collection, deposit schemes, and education, each in a focused paragraph.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both the rise in recycling and ways to encourage it are addressed, but each part relies mainly on one narrow idea.
Develop several distinct causes and solutions, explaining how awareness, financial incentives, and accessible collection each influence behaviour.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a basic cause-to-solution sequence, but the single paragraph, mechanical signposting, and repeated wording weaken cohesion.
Separate causes, solutions, and conclusion into paragraphs and remove formulaic announcements that do not advance the ideas.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant recycling vocabulary is used, but frequent inaccurate word choices and repetition restrict effective expression.
Replace phrases such as 'creeping the recycling', 'helps to lead the recycling', and 'encourage the people about recycling'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, relative clauses, and sentence construction cause noticeable difficulty for the reader.
Practise complete subject-verb clauses and accurate passive forms before combining ideas into complex sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
An increase in the recycling material such as paper, cans and plastic has been noticed worldwide. Why do you think is this happening? What can be done to encourage recycling among people?
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