The private motor vehicle has greatly improved individual freedom of movement. Moreover, the automobile has become a status symbol. Yet the use of private motor vehicles has contributed to some of today’s most serious problems. How can the use of private motor vehicle be reduced? What is your view? Discuss.

Sample Response

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The wheel is considered by many as the greatest invention in human history and the motor vehicles that we use these days areis a major feature of the industrial agethe main reason we live in the industrial age. The ease of transportation and freedom to move goods from one place to another is major driving forces of modern lifethe main driving factor for a modern era. Yet, the use of private vehicles endangerendangers the environment to a great extent and leads to many serious problems including noisesound and air pollution, accidents, road congestionaccident, congestions on roads and other problemsand many more. There are many steps we can take to reduce the number of private motor vehicles running on the roadsrunning on roads to ensure the safety of the environment and to make the world livable for the upcoming generations.

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First of all, improving the public transportation system would encourage people to use itthose instead of relying on their private cars. People mostly buy private cars to have a comfortable commuting experience, althoughcommuting experience though maintaining private cars is far more expensive. If the public transportation facility is improved, many people would reduce their use of private vehiclesreduce using their private vehicles. Secondly, increasing the price of fuel could be another great measure to discourage people from using and buying private cars. It is natural that higher fuel pricesenhanced fuel price would increase the cost of maintaining private cars and thus more people would think twice before purchasing a new car. In addition, more taxes should be imposed on private car ownership.

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Thirdly, traffic rules should be enforced more strictlymore strictly imposed and practised so that people can’t use private cars if there are fewer than three passengersless than 3 passengers in the car. This rule is applied in many cities and thus they have successfully reduced the number of private cars running on their roads. For goods transportation, water and rail transport should be usedwater and railway should be used. Usually, water and rail transports can carry a much greater quantity of goodsa great more amount of products than the road vehicles and that should be strictly followed. Then, individual awareness is required to reduce the use of private cars. People tend to use their cars even for short distancesfor a small distance. Walking and cycling should be promoted so that people rely on their cars less and thus pollute the environment less. Finally, the ownership of cars should be restricted based on the number of family members, the number of vehicles a single family can purchase and based on their gross incomes.

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In conclusion, the private motor vehicles have great advantages but they severely pollute the environment. Hence their useusages should be reduced by promoting public transporttransportations, making laws strict, increasing fuel price and by creating awareness among the publicamong mass people.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The response takes a clear position and develops an extensive, logically ordered set of measures, with public transport, pricing, regulation, and behavioural change all linked to reduced car use. Its main limitation is that some proposals are asserted too broadly and recurring language inaccuracies reduce precision. The highest priority is to select the most feasible measures, evaluate how they would work, and edit collocations, agreement, and countable nouns carefully.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

8.0
Scoring rule

The response fully addresses the task with a clear view and a wide range of relevant, generally well-explained measures.

Next step

Prioritise the most realistic policies and assess their likely effectiveness instead of adding further undeveloped restrictions.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.5
Scoring rule

The ideas progress logically through well-focused stages, although the long third paragraph contains several distinct measures and the sequencing is somewhat mechanical.

Next step

Group related policies into separate, purpose-led paragraphs and use subtler links between causes, measures, and outcomes.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

A broad topic-specific vocabulary supports detailed discussion, but recurring awkward collocations and countability errors reduce naturalness and precision.

Next step

Refine combinations such as impose traffic rules, higher fuel prices, rail transport, and car use, checking singular and plural forms.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

The response uses varied complex structures with generally clear meaning, though agreement, article, comparison, and noun-form errors recur.

Next step

Proofread each sentence for subject-verb agreement and countable-noun forms, especially where long subjects separate the noun from its verb.

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The private motor vehicle has greatly improved individual freedom of movement. Moreover, the automobile has become a status symbol. Yet the use of private motor vehicles has contributed to some of today’s most serious problems. How can the use of private motor vehicle be reduced? What is your view? Discuss.

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