With an increase in the number of privately owned vehicles, roads are becoming more congested. What measures could both government and individuals take to deal with this situation?
Sample Response
A rapid increaseincrement in private-owned vehicles has caused roads to becomehas caused roads become more congested. If preventive measures are not applied in time, this might create a difficult situationcreate difficult situation globally. As vehicles are now an inseparable part of human life, both the government and individualsboth government and individuals should adoptinhabit some measures. Government plays a vital role in managing vehicle numbersmanaging vehicles number and size of roads. The government can adopt measures like higher tax rateshigher tax-rate, public awareness programmes and wider road construction to manage traffic and discourage the rapid growth in private vehicle usegrowth in the private vehicles. Another solution to this problem is to encourage people to use public transportation by carefully planningmanaging routes. Also, small public transport vehiclessmall public vehicles can be replaced by bigger vehicles and the cost of using public transportationand cost of using public transportation should be considerablyremarkably lower than using private vehicles. Finally, implementing more effective traffic rules can have a marked positive resulthave marked positive result in both minimising the growth rate of private-owned vehicles and managing traffic problems. Along with the government, individuals also play an important role in this context. One preventive measureThe preventive solution that an individual can apply is to minimise the use of private-owned vehicles when it is not necessarywhen not necessary. People should use public transportation services as it reduces the problem of road congestion and use of fuel as well. Encouraging friends, family and neighbours to use private-owned vehicles only when necessary can be another effective measure as well. Individuals should follow traffic rules strictly and encourage the government to adopt effective solutions. In conclusion, government and public both should be responsible and inhabit necessary practices. The problem can be tackled only if both sides act in their part.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response proposes a broad range of measures for both governments and individuals, and its movement from public policy to personal responsibility is easy to follow. However, the ideas are mostly listed rather than explained, the entire essay forms one paragraph, and frequent word-choice and grammar errors make sentences awkward. Prioritise two well-developed measures for each actor, organise them into clear paragraphs, and proofread core verb, article, and collocation patterns.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Measures for both government and individuals are relevant and numerous, but several are asserted without explaining how they would reduce congestion and some points repeat earlier suggestions.
Select two measures for each group and develop the mechanism and likely effect of each one.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves logically from government action to individual responsibility, but one-block paragraphing and repetitive additive linking make the progression mechanical.
Use an introduction, one focused paragraph for each actor, and a separate conclusion with clear topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
The essay has enough transport-policy vocabulary to convey its message, but frequent inaccurate choices such as ‘rapid increment’, ‘private-owned’, and ‘inhabit measures’ weaken clarity.
Use conventional combinations such as ‘rapid increase’, ‘privately owned vehicles’, and ‘adopt measures’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, causative structures, and noun phrases occur throughout the response.
Build shorter complete clauses first, then check articles and agreement before combining them into complex sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
With an increase in the number of privately owned vehicles, roads are becoming more congested. What measures could both government and individuals take to deal with this situation?
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