People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?
Sample Response
Due to the natural reasons, people find it difficult to change the ways they live. It is quite difficult for a majority of people to alter the state of mind, the way they think and the environment they get used to. Therefore several problems can occur when they are told to do and solve their issues in easier and more decent ways. In my opinion, obvious solutions knock the door of psychologists and also family members and relatives should act in these positions. Changes in some cases are inevitable and embracing the new idea and way of life bring many opportunities and hence accepting new things are often not options, but mandatory for us. In modern life, people adjust to different habits and routines and then they do not tend to get involved to change their usual activities. By doing this, they decline any other offer presented by surroundings, especially when these offers are from ones that they do not like. Because of that their resistance increases in not changing. For example, when a parent asked their kid to not do disobedience or not eat chocolate too much, this kid's persistence in the matter sometimes enhances as far as parents ask. That's why the worst and most difficult of the problem is the resistance of children's unruly behaviour. If these issues are not undertaken by someone responsible and coped with the problem, its consequences stay to the rest of child's life vitally. New ideas, technology and changes are often for better ways of life. Not being able to grip the new idea and changes can bring personal and social problems. Parents who cannot embrace the idea of modernization and generation gaps often have bitter experience with their children. Changes in society are also natural with time and the old way life will not remain forever. New ideas often come to people with open and broader perspective. Old traditions have their importance but new customs, ideas and changes should also be accepted for the overall betterment of the society. A healthy family and social relationship, use of technology, guidance and mutual understanding people of different generations can minimise this problem to a great extent. It is natural that old people will not easily accept the radical changes of ideas, values and way of life. New generations should talk to them, discuss them and present the good sides of the changes they have accepted. To conclude, it is best to consult these overwhelming behaviours to an expert for the sake of the welfare of both the people and the society. By the help of modern psychology I do not think of a problem unsolved, and besides this is a crucial problem for a society that comprised of healthy-thinking people.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Remove the article Original: Due to the natural reasons Suggested revision: For natural reasons Why it matters: Reasons is used generally here, so the definite article is inappropriate.
- 2. Add possession Original: alter the state of mind Suggested revision: alter their state of mind Why it matters: The possessive pronoun links the state of mind to the people being discussed.
- 3. Use formal phrasing Original: the environment they get used to Suggested revision: the environment to which they are accustomed Why it matters: The replacement is more precise and formal while preserving the meaning.
- 4. Choose precise wording Original: more decent ways Suggested revision: more appropriate ways Why it matters: Decent does not clearly describe the suitability of methods for solving problems.
- 5. Correct the expression Original: solutions knock the door of psychologists Suggested revision: solutions lie in consulting psychologists Why it matters: The original expression is not an English idiom and obscures the proposed solution.
- 6. Clarify the role Original: act in these positions Suggested revision: play a role Why it matters: Play a role clearly expresses the intended involvement of family members.
- 7. Fix number agreement Original: embracing the new idea and way of life bring Suggested revision: embracing new ideas and ways of life brings Why it matters: The gerund phrase is singular and therefore requires brings.
- 8. Fix agreement Original: accepting new things are often not options Suggested revision: accepting new things is often not optional Why it matters: The gerund phrase takes a singular verb, and optional expresses the intended meaning naturally.
- 9. Fix verb pattern Original: get involved to change Suggested revision: become willing to change Why it matters: Get involved does not take an infinitive in this meaning.
- 10. Name people clearly Original: presented by surroundings Suggested revision: presented by those around them Why it matters: Surroundings refers to an environment rather than the people making offers.
- 11. Use correct phrase Original: resistance increases in not changing Suggested revision: resistance to change increases Why it matters: Resistance takes to when naming what is opposed.
- 12. Correct verb phrase Original: asked their kid to not do disobedience Suggested revision: asks their child not to be disobedient Why it matters: The revision uses the present tense and the natural adjective construction.
Suggested Rewrites
- Due to the natural reasons For natural reasons
- alter the state of mind alter their state of mind
- the environment they get used to the environment to which they are accustomed
- more decent ways more appropriate ways
- solutions knock the door of psychologists solutions lie in consulting psychologists
- act in these positions play a role
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response recognises both parts of the task and offers potentially useful solutions through family communication, guidance, and professional help. Its main limitation is that the discussion is diffuse: problems are often asserted vaguely, the child-behaviour example distracts from the wider issue, and frequent language errors sometimes obscure meaning. Prioritise a clear problems-and-solutions structure with specific causal explanations and more controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
Both problems and solutions are addressed, but several ideas are vague, repetitive, or insufficiently connected to resistance to life changes.
Select two clearly defined problems and pair each with a feasible solution, explaining the cause, consequence, and likely result.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is a discernible movement from problems toward solutions, but the single long paragraph, repetition, and abrupt shifts weaken progression.
Organise the response into an introduction, focused problem paragraphs, matched solution paragraphs, and a concise conclusion with clear topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a fairly broad vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices make several statements awkward or unclear.
Use simpler, established combinations such as seek professional help, accept new ideas, and experience generational conflict instead of forcing unfamiliar expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, prepositions, verb patterns, and sentence construction sometimes impede clarity.
Build shorter complete sentences first, then check each clause for a subject, a correctly formed verb, and accurate linking before combining ideas.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?
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