Do you think consumers should avoid over packed products or it is the responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products?
Sample Response
Over-packaging of products has become a trend in today's competitive world. Producers are trying to attract consumers with attractive packagingan attractive packaging of their products, without consideringnot bothered about its negative impact not only on our environment but also on usersbut the users as well. It should be the responsibility of the producers to limit the waste of resourcesthe wastage of the resources in the form of unnecessary packaging.
The cost of over packaging is actually added to the product sold. In fact, at times it is seen the packing cost and durability is more that the product itself. The type of packaging found in the pharmaceutical industrypharmaceutical industries can be taken as an example here. Pills and tablets are often packedare found to be packed in much largerbigger and colourful strips than necessaryneeded. Does this increase the sale of medicine? No. Such packaging is of no concern to the consumers. HoweverBut, the cost of medicine would definitely be lowerwould have definitely been lesser if sold in a simpler packagingsimple outlook.
Further, the material used is mostly non-biodegradabledisposable which adds to the environmental pollution to a great extent. Snacks and other food items packaged in eye-catchingcatchy shimmering coloured packets are consumed on a large scale by everybody. These packets are really difficult to dispose of as they emit poisonous gas if burnt and if not can be seen to contaminate water somewhere. Producers should realise the importance of using materials like paper and stick to simple packaging.
Packaging as seen increases the cost of the product and also makes our environment unhealthy. So, this packaging boom should be addressed seriouslychecked on a serious note by the producers. Moreover, the producers should be restricted to predefined rules and parameters set by the government. It is also recommended that an awareness among the users that quality of the product is important rather than the attractive packaging.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response takes a clear position and supports it with relevant arguments about product cost and environmental harm, using concrete packaging examples throughout. Its main limitation is recurring imprecision in wording and sentence construction, which sometimes makes otherwise sensible points sound awkward. The highest-priority improvement is to use more accurate collocations and proofread complex sentences for complete, grammatically controlled expression.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear position and develops two relevant reasons with specific examples and a consistent conclusion.
Develop the proposed government and consumer measures more precisely to add depth beyond the main producer-focused arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with generally effective linking.
Use referencing and transitions more naturally so that connections do not rely on formulaic markers such as ‘Further’ and ‘Moreover’.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range of topic vocabulary, but several inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Replace awkward phrases such as ‘simple outlook’ and ‘checked on a serious note’ with natural, context-appropriate wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the argument clearly, although article, agreement, and sentence-completion errors recur.
Proofread each complex sentence for complete clause structure, accurate articles, and subject-verb agreement.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Do you think consumers should avoid over packed products or it is the responsibility of product producers to avoid extra packaging of products?
Your response
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