In Some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Sample Response
It is observed that a solitary way of lifesolitary way of life is widespreadrampant in many nations of the world these days, unlike the pastthe old days. This is as a result of situations like avoidance of people for wrong mission and disappointment from family and friends. However, I believeopine that it is a negative developmenta wrong idea because of its negative consequences like evil occurrences and depression.
In the first place, togetherness was highly valuedtogetherness was duly cherished by the people in these countriescitizens of the nations. For instance, people were fondfound of living together under the same roof because of athe series of benefits attached to it. For example, people sharedpeople did share their problems with their housemates so as to find joint solutions to them. One other advantage of living together is mutual supportsupportiveness which is the act of helping one another both morally and materially. Sharing accommodationStaying in the same apartment was very common among the students, the young adults, and so on.
ConverselyIn another way round, the reverse is the case these days as many people are seen living solitarily. Though, in my country, research makes me understand that those who engage in lonely life do this to avoid people so as to have a chance to carry out some nefarious activities such as robbery and kidnapping. Furthermore, probably to avoid family and friends as a result of past disappointment from the relatives.
Comparing the two ways of living, I am of the opinionI am of opinion that living alonelonely living is detrimental because of the negative consequences related to it, such as criminal activity involving the concealment of weaponsdevilish occurrence in relation to harboring weapons for evil activities. In addition to that is depression from those who have been disappointed in the past.
In conclusion, living together in the pastliving together in the past years is more beneficial than the current practice of living alonethe idea current days of staying alone because of the harms associated with living aloneevils connected to loneliness.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear negative position and uses a recognisable essay structure, with relevant discussion of companionship and isolation. Its main limitation is that several claims about solitary living are implausible, repetitive, or only briefly supported, while frequent awkward phrasing reduces precision. The highest-priority improvement is to develop two credible consequences with clear causal explanations and specific, realistic examples.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The task is addressed with a consistent negative position, but the main reasons are repetitive and sometimes weakly supported or implausible.
Develop two credible negative effects of living alone through clear cause-and-effect reasoning and realistic examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear paragraph sequence, although progression is somewhat mechanical and several ideas repeat rather than build.
Give each body paragraph one distinct controlling idea and use linking expressions only where they clarify the logical relationship.
Lexical Resource
There is some range of less common vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices make the language unnatural.
Prioritise precise, conventional combinations such as social isolation, emotional support, and risk of depression instead of forcing uncommon expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but recurring article, agreement, preposition, and sentence-boundary errors weaken control.
Proofread each sentence for a complete main clause, then check articles, verb agreement, and prepositions systematically.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In Some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
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