Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. why do you think this is happening? what can the governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
Sample Response
I think it is true that in almost every country today each household and family produces a large amount of waste every week. most of this rubbish comes from the packaging from the things we buy, such as processed food. but even if we buy fresh food without packaging, we still produce rubbish from the plastic bags used everywhere to carry shopping home.
the reason why we have so much packaging is that we consume so much more on a daily basis than families did in the past. convenience is also very important in modern life. so we buy packaged or canned food that can be transported from long distance and stored until we need it, first in the supermarket and then at home.
however, I think the amount of waste produced is also a result of our tendency to use something once and throw it away. we forget that even the cheapest plastic bag has used up valuable resources and energy to produce. we also forget that it is a source of pollution and difficult to dispose of.
I think, therefore, the governments need to raise this awareness in the general public. children can be educated about environmental issues at school, but adults need to take action. the governments can encourage such action by putting taxes on packaging, such as plastic bags, by providing recycling services and by fining households and shops that do not attempt to recycle their waste.
in conclusion, with the political will, such measures could really reduce the amount of rubbish we produce. certainly, nobody wants to see our resources used up and our planet poisoned by waste.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Capitalize sentence start Original: most Suggested revision: Most Why it matters: The first word of a new sentence must begin with a capital letter.
- 2. Capitalize sentence start Original: but Suggested revision: But Why it matters: The first word of a new sentence must begin with a capital letter.
- 3. Fix preposition choice Original: packaging from the things we buy Suggested revision: packaging of the products we buy Why it matters: ‘Packaging of’ correctly expresses the relationship between products and their packaging.
- 4. Capitalize sentence start Original: the Suggested revision: The Why it matters: The first word of a new paragraph and sentence must be capitalized.
- 5. Capitalize sentence start Original: convenience Suggested revision: Convenience Why it matters: The first word of a new sentence must begin with a capital letter.
- 6. Fix number and preposition Original: from long distance Suggested revision: over long distances Why it matters: The plural noun and preposition ‘over’ are required for travel across varying distances.
- 7. Capitalize sentence start Original: we Suggested revision: We Why it matters: The first word of a new sentence must begin with a capital letter.
- 8. Capitalize sentence start Original: we Suggested revision: We Why it matters: The first word of a new sentence must begin with a capital letter.
- 9. Fix passive construction Original: has used up valuable resources and energy to produce Suggested revision: has required valuable resources and energy to produce Why it matters: The bag does not perform the production, so ‘required’ preserves the intended passive relationship.
- 10. Restore parallel structure Original: it is a source of pollution and difficult to dispose of Suggested revision: it is a source of pollution and is difficult to dispose of Why it matters: Repeating ‘is’ creates parallel predicates linked by ‘and’.
- 11. Remove generic article Original: the governments need Suggested revision: governments need Why it matters: A generic plural noun does not take the definite article here.
- 12. Use natural collocation Original: raise this awareness in the general public Suggested revision: raise public awareness of these issues Why it matters: ‘Raise public awareness of’ is the standard collocation and clearly identifies the topic.
Suggested Rewrites
- most Most
- but But
- packaging from the things we buy packaging of the products we buy
- the The
- convenience Convenience
- from long distance over long distances
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response gives a clear, well-developed explanation of rising waste and proposes a practical range of government measures, with strong logical progression throughout. Its main limitation is the persistent failure to capitalize sentence openings, alongside a few minor phrasing issues, which weakens otherwise controlled language. The highest-priority improvement is to correct this systematic punctuation convention while preserving the essay's precise development.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response fully addresses the causes of increasing rubbish and offers a relevant, well-developed range of government actions.
Explain briefly how the proposed penalties and recycling services would change household or business behaviour to deepen the solution analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument develops in a clear sequence from consumption and convenience to disposability, awareness, and government intervention.
Use slightly more explicit internal linking between the causes and the corresponding solutions to strengthen the overall chain of reasoning.
Lexical Resource
A broad and precise vocabulary range conveys environmental causes and policies naturally, with only occasional imprecise phrasing.
Polish small collocational details such as from long distances and sufficient political will for greater idiomatic accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence structures are varied and largely accurate, but virtually every new sentence begins without the required capital letter.
Apply sentence-initial capitalization consistently and then proofread the few remaining article and number choices.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. why do you think this is happening? what can the governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
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