Ambition is an important characteristic of people in today’s society. How important you think it is for people who want to succeed in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic for success?

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In an era when competition is becomingbecomes increasingly prevalent Deletein contemporary society, individuals are paying more attention to the role of ambition in personal success. From my perspective, it is indispensable for people who want to achieveacquire long-term success and it is a positive trait in the pursuit of success in general. There is no denying that human beings are not inherently diligent. With such a nature, people who lack ambition or goals are prone to lazinessprone to be lazy and reluctant to strive for higher achievements, since significant breakthroughs in their lives necessitate a large amount of endeavour and devotionlarge amounts of endeavour and devotion. However, possessing great ambition means that individuals may have a full understanding of their targets and realise the effort they should devote to fulfilling these aims, motivating and stimulating them to work harder and overcome obstacles encountered during the process. For instance, ambitious people tend to make comprehensive schedules to cope with possible difficulties that may occur on their way to success. Admittedly, excessive ambition is more likely to cause severe problems for both individuals and the whole society. To begin with, ambitious aims which are difficult to achieve may frustrate individuals due to the fact that those people fail to assessverify their own capacities and talents. One of the most striking examples is that an ordinary worker who dreams of getting a promotiongetting promotion may lose his confidence and become disappointed after failing to secure a promotion. Besides, in order to fulfil their ambition, people need to dedicate large amounts of time to their work or study, which may impose a heavy burden on their mental well-beingburden on their mentality, leading to mental health issuessome mental problems. Nonetheless, the merits of having ambition outweigh its demerits. First and foremost, ambition can encourage people to try their best, laying a solid foundation for attainingobtaining success. More importantly, if everyone has ambition and works harder instead of being lazy, social productivity can be enhanced dramatically since all of them get immersed in their work.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.5

The essay provides a clear, well-developed response that directly addresses both prompt questions with strong supporting arguments. Progression is logical throughout, supported by a good variety of sophisticated vocabulary and grammatical structures. To improve further, ensure minor counterarguments are integrated more smoothly without creating slight shifts in tone before returning to the main thesis.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

8.0
Scoring rule

The candidate clearly answers both parts of the prompt, establishing a consistent position on the importance and positive nature of ambition.

Next step

Ensure all counter-arguments, such as the drawbacks of excessive ambition, are tied directly back to answering the main question on balance.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.5
Scoring rule

Paragraphing is logical and cohesive devices are used effectively to signal the flow of ideas throughout the essay.

Next step

Vary transitional phrases to avoid relying on standard formulaic linkers like 'To begin with' and 'Besides'.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.5
Scoring rule

A wide range of vocabulary is used naturally and accurately to convey complex ideas about personal drive and success.

Next step

Refine subtle collocation choices, such as using 'getting a promotion' instead of 'getting promotion'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.5
Scoring rule

A broad variety of complex sentence structures is controlled well with only very minor grammatical errors.

Next step

Maintain consistent accuracy in article usage and infinitive patterns across complex sentences.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Ambition is an important characteristic of people in today’s society. How important you think it is for people who want to succeed in life? Is it a positive or negative characteristic for success?

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