Some people claim that there are different ways of saving energy (electricity and gas), such as using energy for a shorter period of time in the workplace and not using electricity / gas once a week. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Would it be an effective measure to save energy? Give your own opinion.
Sample Response
In modern worldtoday's modern world, non-renewable energy is still an essential part of life. Across the globe, electricity and gas are used by almost every house to big industries. Although I believe that energy wastage should be minimised, I reject the idea thatI refute that we should simply cut down the use of energy for essential purposesfor the essential purposes based on a timetable. The basis for my viewThe base for my views would be personal and professional. From a professional perspective, electricity and gas are invaluable resourcesan invaluable resource to run simple devices such as computers and complex machines such as cranesa simple gadget like computers to more complex machines like cranes. For instance, if we plan to switch off electricity at the workplaceour work area once a weekonce in a week, definitely a majority of the people will be idle, as most of the companies rely on computerscompanies run based on computers. Moreover, if we try to save energysave the energy when it is really needed, precious time of the employees working on electronic devices will be wasted. Therefore, it is essential to ensure that energy is available during working hoursduring the work hours. We should research and invest in producing better energy sourcessource rather than cutting the power for one day a weeka day in a week. The world has become very competitive and imposing a restriction on the working hours in office would simply reduce the productivity of a country. From a personal point of view, energy is essential for chargingmandatory to charge personal gadgets like mobile phones to stay connected with the world. For example, if there is no power and the battery charge of the mobile phone is almost depletedfinishing, then the mobile will be turned off. In addition to that, a switched off smartphone not only cuts off phone calls but also disconnects users from social mediadisconnects from social media as there is no internet connectivity. Thus, it is obvious that electricity should not be cut off or reduced based on a time table. In most of the major cities, gasmajor cities gas is used for cooking, hence not using it for a day would mean that we would need to buy foodfoods from restaurants or fast food shops which are not only expensive but also harmful tofor health. In conclusion, by analysing how much essential is energy and gas in our day to day life, it is very much important that energy is available when required. As nonrenewable energy is precious, steps need to taken, so that they are not wasted. But not using it is not the proper way.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position and supports it with relevant professional and personal consequences of scheduled energy restrictions. However, the argument becomes repetitive, some examples are not fully persuasive, and the absence of paragraph breaks weakens the visible organisation; frequent awkward phrasing also limits accuracy. Organise the professional, personal, and alternative-solution ideas into separate paragraphs and explain a more practical conservation measure in depth.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers the effectiveness question with a clear disagreement and develops relevant reasons from workplace and personal perspectives.
Develop the proposed alternative of cleaner or more efficient energy use instead of relying mainly on repeated consequences of power cuts.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognisable professional-to-personal progression, but presenting nearly the entire essay as one paragraph weakens organisation.
Separate the introduction, workplace argument, personal argument, and conclusion into focused paragraphs with clear internal topic development.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate topic vocabulary and some less-common language, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce naturalness.
Check common combinations such as rely on computers, battery is running out, harmful to health, and sources of energy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence forms and remains understandable, although errors in articles, agreement, prepositions, and omitted words occur regularly.
Proofread systematically for missing auxiliaries and articles, subject-verb agreement, and sentence boundaries in longer constructions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people claim that there are different ways of saving energy (electricity and gas), such as using energy for a shorter period of time in the workplace and not using electricity / gas once a week. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Would it be an effective measure to save energy? Give your own opinion.
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