It is better for boys and girls to study separately rather than study in mixed-sex classes. They are less distracted and this leads to better results. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
Sample Response
Unlike in coeducation, boys and girls study separately in their own classes. Promoters of Single-sex classesSeparate sex classes believe that students could show better results while studying separately. I disagree that mixed sex classes distract the students from their education.
Mixed-sex classes have their ownMixed sex classes have its own advantages and disadvantages. However, their advantagesBut, its advantages are far outweigh their disadvantagesmuch more than disadvantages. One of the key advantages of coeducation is the high level of competition among boys and girls. It is natural and obvious that students try to be ahead of the opposite genderahead of opposite gender, and they work harder and focus on their studies to achieve higher rankingsgain the higher rank. This is also true for extra-curricular activities where boys and girls participate together in various activities.
Another advantage of mixed sex classes is increasedthe confidence. Students in coeducational settingsStudents of coeducation have high confidencea high-level confidence and they can speak confidentlytalk without shyness in front of the opposite genderin front of opposite gender. This will greatly help them in their professional liveslife. Higher confidence also plays a vital role in their interpersonal skills and overall personality. In additionIn addition to these, most collegesmost of the colleges and universities do not have separate classes for boys and girls, so students already studying in coeducational settingschildren already studying in coeducation never face any adjustment problemsproblem in mixed-sex classes in colleges and universities.
In the end, it is concluded that boys and girls studying in mixed-sex classes are not distracted due to coeducation. In fact, distraction varies from person to person. A student who studies separately can be more distracted due to the absence of the opposite genderabsence of opposite genderand waste precious study time, and waste the precious study time finding the solution of such distraction.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its clear disagreement, supported through logically ordered points about competition, confidence, and preparation for later education. Its main limitation is that several claims are asserted rather than convincingly explained, while the final idea about distraction is speculative and weakens the argument. The highest-priority improvement is to develop fewer reasons with concrete, credible explanation and examples, while correcting recurring article, agreement, and collocation errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported by several relevant reasons, but some ideas remain generalised or insufficiently substantiated.
Develop each main reason with a specific example or causal explanation, and replace the speculative final claim with stronger evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has clear paragraphing and a logical progression from position to supporting reasons and conclusion, though some linking is mechanical.
Use transitions more selectively and make the connection between each example and the central claim more explicit.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for discussing education and social development, but recurrent unnatural collocations reduce precision.
Improve natural phrasing around expressions such as “the confidence,” “opposite gender,” and “finding the solution of such distraction.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures, but recurring errors with articles, agreement, plurals, and prepositions are noticeable.
Prioritise agreement and article control, for example revising “classes have its” and consistently using an article before “opposite gender.”
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is better for boys and girls to study separately rather than study in mixed-sex classes. They are less distracted and this leads to better results. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
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