In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule? Use specific reasons and details to support your position.
Sample Response
There is no scope for any doubt that "Smoking is injurious to health ". Taking this fact into consideration, many countries have taken action to prohibittaken actions of strictly prohibiting smoking in public places. I strongly feel that this is a good move to reduce smoking and keepkeeping the environment safe, even though many smokers are strongly against this move. First of all, smoking not only affects the health of smokershealth condition of the smokers but also that of nonsmokersbut also of the nonsmokers through passive smokingby a process called passive smoking. In fact, scientific evidence showsit is a scientifically proven fact that passive smokers face greater health risksget more health hazards than smokerscompared to the smokers. Various diseases, such asVarious diseases like asthma, lung cancer, pneumonia, heart conditionsheart and valve ailments are common amongare found common among such individuals. This is whyThis is why, to improve public healththe public health and to prevent dangerous diseases, banning smoking in public places and in office buildings is an effective move. Secondly, smoking in public places such as schoolsplaces like schools, parks, shopping complexes, beaches, offices, etc., tendsoffices etc. tend to develop a strong desire among young peoplegeneration to adoptinculcate this habit. To nurture a healthy young generation, we should support the idea that public smoking should be banned. Finally, by discouraging smoking in outdoor areas, smokers may gradually be encouragedthe smokers can be gradually forced to quit the habit or reducequit their habit or can reduce the number of cigarettes they smokethe number of cigarettes being smoked. Considering this, I feelConsidering this I feel that banning public smoking is a good rule and all countries should adopt this policy. In conclusion, I strongly recommend that all countries should put forward this rule for the health and well-being of their public. Even the smoking zones that are already placed in some of the public places should also be banned completely.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains an unequivocal position and supports it with a logical sequence of health, social-influence, and cessation arguments. Its main limitation is presentation: the entire essay forms one paragraph, and several awkward or inaccurate language choices reduce precision despite generally clear meaning. The highest priority is to separate the argument into purposeful paragraphs and improve grammatical control when expressing cause, comparison, and proposed outcomes.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly answers the question, sustains a clear position, and gives several relevant reasons, though some claims are overstated or only briefly supported.
Support the health and youth-influence claims with more precise explanation and avoid unsupported assertions about passive smokers facing greater harm than smokers.
Coherence and Cohesion
The reasons follow a clear logical sequence, but the single-paragraph format and repetitive sequencing devices limit effective organisation.
Use separate introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, grouping each major reason with its supporting detail.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range of topic vocabulary, but recurring collocational problems make several expressions sound unnatural or imprecise.
Use more natural combinations such as introduce a ban, develop a habit, and pose health risks instead of literal or awkward phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex sentences, but errors in agreement, articles, parallel forms, and verb patterns occur regularly while meaning remains clear.
Check subject-verb agreement and parallel verb forms, especially in sentences containing comparisons, infinitives, or coordinated outcomes.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule? Use specific reasons and details to support your position.
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