Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem?
Sample Response
Trees, from all over the world, are diminished and are continues to be reduced by mankind, with many serious perils to our nature and people should not connive at this deforestation. We need oxygen for our survival and trees provide us with this essential elementprovide us this most important element for lifefor our living. Immediate individual and governmental steps should be taken to save our most trusted friends, trees. Forests are the essential source of oxygen and trees enrichencourages the soil and keep the ground from erosion. Furthermore, forests are habitats for many animalshabitats of a lot of animals and are home to myriad insects. People should take these aspects of forests into account and strengthen relevant regulationsreform some regulations. The government should be strictermore strict to control unauthorised tree-cuttingthe unauthorised chop down activities. Namely, Amazon rainforest has been felled and used commercially and has already caused huge damagea huge damage to the wildlife and the environment. Consequently, proper legislation is vitalproper legislations are very vital for preventing deforestation. In addition to legislation,In addition to legislations informing people might help to slow the destruction of forestsslow down saw down of forests. In spite of the legislations are oppose to people who remove trees, people will not perceive how perilous these actions are and they will continue to cut trees without realising the danger. Because people profit from the tradeDue to their benefit from the trade, the most efficient way to prevent deforestation is to inform people. For instance, governments might produce advertisementsmake some advertisement to show on the TVs and also on the roads. Furthermore, broadcasting interviews with experts on the newsmaking some interviews by experts in the news may be another solution.
More forest protection measuresforest securities should be in place to prevent people from cutting down trees. Logging should be banned in areas where the percentage of forest coverpercentage or forest is low and alternative ways of cooking should be introduced. Finally artificial and metal furniture should be used instead of using woodwoods. To sum up, in spite of the vital roles forests play in our life people do not stop to cut down trees and use them for luxury. In this case, governments should reform legislations and inform people about logging danger. Without information people deforestation will continue for commercial use and array of animals and insects will get extended and we will endanger our mother planet.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response proposes several relevant solutions, including stronger laws, public education, enforcement, alternative fuels, and substitute materials, and it shows clear concern for environmental consequences. However, development is uneven and frequent grammar and word-choice errors sometimes strain meaning; the priority is to organise two or three main solutions into separate paragraphs and explain clearly how each would reduce deforestation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Several relevant solutions are offered, but many are briefly stated, repeated, or only loosely explained in terms of their practical effect.
Choose the strongest solutions and develop each with an implementation method, responsible actor, and likely outcome.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall direction is understandable, but the very long first paragraph, uneven grouping, and mechanical connectors weaken progression.
Separate regulation, education, and alternative-resource measures into focused paragraphs with clear topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
There is enough environmental vocabulary to discuss the issue, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce clarity and precision.
Use established phrases such as illegal logging, public awareness campaigns, forest rangers, and become extinct.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some sentence variety is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, clauses, and sentence construction cause regular difficulty.
Build shorter complete sentences first, checking subject-verb agreement and verb forms before combining clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem?
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