Some people think that it is wrong for humans to search for new worlds in space when we have so many problems on our own planet. Others believe such searches help mankind to develop. Which viewpoint do you agree with?
Sample Response
Only a small percentage of peoplea few percentages of people on earth are affluent while most of the world’s populationa majority of the world population is suffering from hunger, malnutrition, diseases, scarcity of housing, lack of cleanpure drinking water and the list goes onthis list would go on and on. A group of people think that conducting space researchresearching outer space is totally unjustified while people on earth have so many problems. By contrastOn the contrary, the other group believesthe second group of people believe that space researchouter world research is important for our own advancement. I agree with the second group of people who believe space research is necessary and justified. First and foremost, only a few developed countries like the USA, Australia, Japan, Russia and the UK devote money and resources to space researchspend money and resources for the space analysis. If they stop this exploration and research, they are not going to give these fundsgive this fund to poor countries to address their housing, crime, disease, and hunger problemsfight their housing, crime, diseases, and hunger issues. In other wordsTo put in other words, in practice, it is not possiblepractically it is not possible to use the space research fund to solve pressing issues of all the countries. Furthermore, poor and developing nations should utilise their own resources to address their problems rather than acceptingtaking donations or loans from rich nations. Another key point is thatAnother key thing to remember, space exploration is necessary to understand the universe and life on earth. This could create new opportunities for developmentopen a whole new window of development. So far we have not been able to trace any intelligent species on other plant but who knows when we meet them what development and information they might share with us. ItIT might be the best next solution for the pressing issues we have on our small planet. We should not stop studying the universe we live in and concentrating on earthly issues is not a viable solution for the overall development of the mankind. In conclusion, space research is purely scientific workworks and can bring unimaginable development for us. Since only a few developed countries invest inon space exploration and research, such research should be continuedit should be carried on.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay states a clear preference for continued space research and offers two relevant lines of support: national budgets would not automatically be redirected abroad, and exploration can expand human knowledge. Its main limitation is that the development case becomes highly speculative, especially the claim about intelligent life, while the one-paragraph structure and frequent language errors reduce clarity. Prioritise a concrete, evidence-based benefit such as satellite technology or medical innovation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear pro-exploration position is maintained and supported by relevant funding and development arguments, though the main development example is speculative.
Replace the hypothetical alien-contact point with a developed real-world benefit of space research, such as communications, climate monitoring, or materials science.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has a broadly logical sequence and uses clear transitions, but the entire response is one paragraph and several points repeat the position.
Separate the introduction, funding argument, scientific-development argument, and conclusion into focused paragraphs with distinct functions.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate topic vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision despite generally clear meaning.
Use natural terms such as ‘a small percentage’, ‘safe drinking water’, ‘space research’, ‘research funding’, ‘another planet’, and ‘invest in’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of structures is attempted, but agreement, article, number, clause-linking, capitalization, and sentence-boundary errors occur frequently.
Correct forms such as ‘scientific work’, ‘a fund’, ‘on another planet’, and divide the long sentence joining study of the universe with earthly problems.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that it is wrong for humans to search for new worlds in space when we have so many problems on our own planet. Others believe such searches help mankind to develop. Which viewpoint do you agree with?
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