With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes. To what extent do you agree with this view?
Sample Response
Many developing and developed countries are spending huge amounts of money on space exploration. They are interestedkeenly interested in finding out the existence of life in other galaxiesexistence of life on galaxies and stars. This is a lengthy process, which requiresrequired huge funds and time. People argue that space exploration is a waste of time and money. This moneyamount should be spent on other problems. I believe that helping and improving living standards in poorer nationsliving standard of poor nations is the best way to use the money. Rich nations play a pivotal role in bringing change and prosperity to poorer nationsprosperity for poor nations. Developing countries such as Africa, Syria etc. have serious problems in health, education, and employment sectorshealth, education and employment sectors. These problems could only be solvedThat could only be solved with the help of developed nations. Many countries are giving financial aidaids and others are investing directly in order to solve and mitigate the people's hardshipswoes of peoples and receivereceived respect and gratitude in this regard. However, discovering unresolved mysteries is a real challenge for scientistsfor the scientist. Many countries are funding research centres to uncoverunfold hidden mysteries of the world. This is time consuming and lengthy work. Scientists are searching for natural resourcesin search of natural resources that are scarce on Earthless in quantity on earth. Their success could substantially change the world and opencould substantially change the world and will open new horizons for progressa new horizon of success. To conclude, I believe that it is an ethical responsibilityethical and moral responsibility of nations to eradicate problems in their neighbouring countries. Meanwhile, research on space exploration should be continued until we obtain the desired resultsget desired results. It is a time-consuming process but it will leave undeniable benefits for people's livesbenefits on people lives in case of success.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a relevant, balanced position and offers plausible reasons both for redirecting funds and for continuing exploration. Its main weakness is that the degree of agreement shifts between the introduction and conclusion, while several ideas remain general and the single-paragraph presentation weakens organization. Prioritize a consistently qualified thesis, then develop each side in separate paragraphs with specific, logically connected support.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the issue and presents relevant arguments on social needs and potential benefits of space research, but its precise degree of agreement is not fully consistent.
State one qualified position at the outset and ensure every argument and the conclusion reinforce that same extent of agreement.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a broadly understandable sequence and uses linking expressions, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph obscures the stages of the discussion.
Separate the introduction, each main argument, and the conclusion into purposeful paragraphs with clearer internal progression.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonably varied vocabulary for development, aid, research, and discovery, though several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural.
Improve collocational precision in phrases about financial aid, living standards, scientific research, and benefits to people's lives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures conveys the main meaning clearly, despite recurring errors in articles, agreement, tense, plurals, and possessives.
Proofread systematically for noun forms and agreement, especially articles, countability, verb tense, and possessive endings.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
With all the problems in the world today, spending money on space exploration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes. To what extent do you agree with this view?
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