Governments around the world are spending billions in support of space programs. This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
There is an opinion that countries are spending a lot of their assets on space projects while they should have rather financed in the medical science sufficiently. Spaceships are flying all over the Universe while people are dyingat the time people are dying from AIDS or even from influenzaor even flu. Is there any point inof throwing money into outer spacethe outer space? On the one hand, humans have not fought so many dangerous and highly contagious diseases so far though many dangerous diseases have wiped away the population of an entire city at a time. Moreover, industrialisation and economic progress have brought new diseases as a result of people living more comfortable livesreceiving more comfortable life. These includeThey are diabetes, cardiovascular problems, etc. In addition, launching just one space shuttle into the sky requires so many natural resources and causes so much pollutionbrings so many pollutions that it negatively greatly harms the environmentinfluences ecology a lot. This creates new health problemsThat brings us new health issues, that need additional funding, which could be redirected from excessive spendingwithdrawn from excessive payments for space research. On the other hand, scientists have already startedscientists already have started raising funds from commercial pharmaceutical companies. A lot of diseases have been controlledfought in just the last 100 yearsin just last 100 years according to many and there has been an increase inthere is an increase in mankind's life expectancy. Moreover, improved health and increased longevity among the populationelongated life of population lead to a new problem – overpopulation. Space research can help to find a new home for the Earth's inhabitants. The last, but not the least, who knows, there is a chance we could found other planets where a panacea for all diseases is waiting for us or a more advanced civilisation is waiting for us with unimaginable knowledge. As for me, I am not a very healthy person and neither are my parentsand my parents either. However, if there is even a very small chance thata one, very small chance, that something exciting will happen and astronauts will encounter an alien civilisationmeet alien civilisation on other planets, I would not be happy that the government is spending money only on medicinegovernment is spending money for medicine only. We have an overcrowded planet and we should search for ways of expanding our habitat.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response engages with both spending priorities and offers several relevant reasons, ultimately making a discernible case for retaining investment in space research. Its main limitation is the loose, single-paragraph organisation, which makes the position and progression harder to follow, while speculative claims and frequent language errors weaken precision. Prioritise a clear thesis, separate body paragraphs, and focused development of the strongest evidence-based arguments.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both sides are considered and a final position is discernible, but the stance emerges late and some supporting ideas are speculative or insufficiently developed.
State a qualified disagreement in the introduction and develop two strongest reasons with realistic evidence rather than multiple speculative possibilities.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has a broadly logical contrast between health and space spending, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph weakens progression and clarity.
Use an introduction, separate body paragraphs for the competing priorities, and a distinct conclusion with clear topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate topical range, but recurrent inaccurate word choices and collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Use more accurate combinations such as "invest in medical research," "causes pollution," and "combat diseases."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are mixed with generally clear meaning, although errors in articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction occur frequently.
Edit each complex sentence for one main grammatical relationship, focusing especially on articles, countability, and forms such as "could find."
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Governments around the world are spending billions in support of space programs. This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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